As I sit here and wonder continuing to ponder about what is to come and to be.
The days go by and I don't know why but still there is so much for me too see.
With each day I continue to pray about what I should say to thee.
So what comes next is all so complex I'm not sure we're meant to be.
Yet the choice that I make will be for both of our sakes so know that I'm setting you free.
Please tell me what you think
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Very nice use of internal rhyme and monorhyme. Excellent title, as it can apply aptly to each line; wondering "what is to be," what will be seen, what should be said, what might be, and if the freed party will choose to return of their own inclination and will.
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Thank you!
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great! it truly amazing!
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Thank you.
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This is good. It shows that you're making the decision to break up for both your sakes. I liked thesubltler rhyme you used as well.
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Written honestly from the heart and soul, which is what I love to see from a true poet. Nicely done! You should be proud of this piece!
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Thanks
Thank you. I really do appreciate the feed back.
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I like the internal rhymes here, and the galloping rhythm that moves me along through the poem, as thoughts follow each other. The poem makes me think of the old adage about setting love free, and it will return of its own sake. I see this was written last year - I hope love did come back for you.
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I love how there was a almost musical rhythm too this. When I read it I could help but add a little tune
I also loved the last lines
Yet the choice that I make will be for both of our sakes so know that I'm setting you free.
I could really relate to those lines
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