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Friend

I spent my life looking for things

That I never wanted in the first place.

Of course I didn't find them,

So I was left with nothing.

 

I was lost, Wandering around in a void

Spiraling inside this cyclone of confusion-

And I was left alone.

Alone to watch,

To watch the world

Through closed doors and bolted windows.

Always on the outside looking in.

 

I was invisible.

 

I cried myself to sleep each night

Waiting for a savior.

Rotting inside my dispair.

 

Misery was my only companion.

 

Pain was all I knew.

 

Through the darkness

And depth of my agony.

You found me.

 

You picked me up

And became my savior.

 

I owe my life to you.

 

Thank you.

Author notes

I dedicate this poem to my friend, Denise Mcallister. I love you, thank you for all that you have done to bring the smile back onto my face

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  • penman gold member
    November 14, 2007
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    Wonderful

    Very well done. A great poem that was most deserving of the honorable mention.


  • warrior-eagle
    November 13, 2007

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    Hmmmm. This is a very good poem, very well written, very sweet and simply wonderful. As I read this all I could think about was how I owe my life to Jesus because it was Him that took me out of that pain and despair. I will not say that everything is shiny now, but because of Him I am standing. Why did i type this? I am not sure, go ask God.
    She isn't your savior, I know you meant this in a good way, but just remember that your real savior will never never depart from you nor cause you pain unless it is to break you and mold you into what He wants you to be.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • Angel Of Heaven99
    September 6, 2007

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    very sweet

    I am sorry you had some painful times but am so happy for you, so happy you found love! Good luck in my contest


    • Artistic-Soul
      September 6, 2007
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      pain does not end when you find love but when love finds you
      so as far as im aware love is still looking


  • DarkWind
    September 4, 2007
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    good

    actually great however there are some spelling issues...dispair

  • cherchezlafemme
    September 4, 2007

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    A spectacular poem with precious moments in love. Your writing gives a lot of pleasure. It's awesome when we make room in our life for wonders and simple gifts of love. Love these lines
    Through the darkness
    And depth of my agony.
    You found me
    I cried myself to sleep each night
    Waiting for a savior.
    Rotting inside my dispare.
    Beautiful rhymes. Your thoughts and awareness of your partner makes it easier to appreciate her beauty within. I feel the same soul/love connection with my husband.

    • Artistic-Soul
      September 4, 2007
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      would you believe me if i said that i didnt plan to do that in fact i didnt even notice those rhymes until you pointed that out to me


  • Serene
    September 4, 2007

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    The sweetness of your tender heart brings such emotions to portray before the feet of the one whom you owe, a beautiful tribute for the one that touched your heart and soul~


  • Stardust-luvr
    August 31, 2007

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    a well done write showing your heart from misery to enlightenment of love and hope to greater tomorrows. It is always a blessing when 2 souls connect in a way that is guided through faith and trust many blessings always xxx

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