looking back now...
on the first time we met...
i was attempting to figure out...
what i'll never forget...
a lust at first...
it broiled and burned...
soon changed to a longing...
as my heart slowly learned...
that wat i wish was there...
could never ever be...
we became too close...
thats why, you see...
i can't tell you now...
what i wouldn't back then...
i must try to bare it...
hold my tounge and grin...
i have to hold back the feelings...
that have grown, become deep...
i must hold back an urge...
to pounce or leap...
i know it won't help...
(me letting all this out)...
but if you just read it...
i'll learn to live without...
that unforgettable feeling...
i get when i'm with you...
that feeling of pure bliss...
that only i knew...
i hope you miss me...
and i hope you keep in mind...
that this poem was for you...
and maybe you'll find...
that the time that was spent...
ment more than you could've known...
and now i'm leaving...
entering a new zone...
i thought i'd have time...
but evidentially not...
i wish i would've told you...
what i obviously couldnot...
Author notes
it IS personal...
i hope they get it...
A contest entry
- No Perfection by xTomorrowx.
500 points, ended June 6, 2008, 33 entries
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Comments
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Awesome =)
Definitely the kind of thing I was looking for in this contest =)
The emotion is there the whole way through, just explaining the situation and not going so far in depth to make the story really long and not as emotional...
At the same time the rhythm of the piece was great, it all fit together perfectly...
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck! =) -
I'm sorry... this one as welll has caught my attention... ill explain later i have to go dad yellin
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Wow
This is very sad... But I know how it feels... I was once head over heals with this guy that soon became so close to me he was like a big brother... And I never told him my feelings... This poem is full of emotion.... I love the rhythm.... I'm sorry that you have to go through all of this... And I hope maybe one day this person will notice your love for them... Oh not being rude but you might want to put a space between could and not in the last sentence... Other then that wonderful poem full of emotion and pain.... That you for sharing this wonderful piece of art with us.... Much Appreciated
-UnheardPain
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