Enigmatic tunes
of remembrance hummed
as huffed sighs pushed past
pale lips.
Memories strummed
to a black and white
beat;
classic dream shades faded
inside a horned solo's
echo.
Heated concerts canceled
with the naked truth;
simply, just sex
so cold and unfulfilling
and yet,
{as I filtered out affection}
welcomed.
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I have a feeling you knew I'd love this one...the soft undertones of saxappeal
and then the ending is perfect...this reminds me of something Nicollette would write, and I don't know why
Bel this is amazing
so glad you came
excellent
contender
Peace and hugs
Muddy
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Richard,
To have you say is reminded you of something Nicolette would write humbles me so as she is a phenomenal poet! To be able to pen in this contest beside all the amazing talent that has come forth is truly an honor indeed
But most of all to hear you say you enjoyed it as you have is the biggest honor I could receive. It truly was my pleasure to write for you and your contest!
Love ya hun!
Bel
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aaaaahhh I have commented this one neither
This is simply beautiful - in one word.
And looking at the contest it's in, I suddenly remember I was planning to to write something too for this
oh
, there's not that much time anymore but I'll see if I can compete with ya 
although that would probably be redundant... cause I'm pretty sure there are a billion of other terrific pieced crawling around that contest page
Good luck with this one sweetypie!
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"Memories strummed
to a black and white
beat;
classic dream shades faded
inside a horned solo's
echo."
Impressive penning, of course, Bel. Great picture, too. But, ahhh, the melancholy I felt pouring from the words, my Friend. You deserve so much better, you know. Affection should be poured on you like honey, not filtered out as though it was an allergen. Good luck in Richard's contest, Sweetie. Wanda
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I havent been on in a while so I thought I would check out some of your poetry! this was really well done!
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Oh this is so sad. Such a terrible place to be. You have expressed the emotion so well. Most of us can relate to this. Best of luck in the contest.
Jeannie
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beautiful
Damn Auntie.
You always leave me sorta speechless as I read your poems. You seem to have this element to your poems, that I never find anywhere else. You write them so simple, yet so jam packed with power and emotions. Great job! I like how you keep it flowing and added that line in the brackets as a kinda side thought to the poem. Love the picture too! Wonderful and brilliant poem!Always,
Amadahy
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This is a very deep and heartwrenching piece. What an amazing piece, don't know how you do it. Deserves gold for sure.
Love you,
Your Lunar Angel
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Oh my gosh... Auntie Bel this is purely amazing... I have missed reading your work and talking to you. Still you never cease to amazing me with your words. xoxo Meg
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