My soul is scorched,
By the blazing sun,
My soul is tamed,
By my lunar love.
My soul and I make passion,
All through the night to you,
My inner phoenix has died a million times,
When bereft of you,
But grows back a hundred times stronger,
We pine for you,
Throughout the baron days,
But when the moon rises,
We're alive, and yearning for you,
And needing your midnight feast.
I come to life at night,
And you satisfy my hunger,
You erase all my other thoughts,
Like the moon that covers the sun,
In a lunar eclipse,
That dominates the diamond skies,
Like you somehow conquer my mind.
Author notes
Option 9 - Write about love
In a list
A contest entry
- Less Than Five Trohpies Or None At All? Then C'Mere! by amaranthine lover.
516 points, ended September 12, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Celebrate with Me In Completion of a Goal by earthstar.
425 points, ended October 17, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Found It! Have you? by Nicole Cudworth.
900 points, ended November 6, 2007, 27 entries
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You write with a poignant habd and the images that come to mind as I read this are painted through your words... nicely done.
Thank you for entering!
Love and luck in all you endeavor.
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Awesome poem! I love the style in which your wrote it. Best of luck!
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thank you!! xx
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WOW!!!!! What a great read this one is! I love it! You did a great job on it! I simply love how you are comparing immortality within your soul, and the emotions that keep rising from it... Great job!!! Best of luck in this contest that we both have entered!
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Nice write it's like you are crying out for the one person you can't have nd dream of what it would be like. I like the comparrison of immortality within as your soul and emotions rise and rise again. Well done you have much talent within I feel. Anna-Marie.
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many thanks, I'm really pleased you enjoyed it
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oh yes I love this, awesome repetition of words and phrases, the technique works well for this piece thanks for entering
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Nice poem. Great write it was a nice read. It has great flow. I loved it. Can wait to read more of your stuff.
-Tammy
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thank u, means a lot that you took the time to leave me a comment, seeing as I don't have many! lol
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good poem
its really good. i like ur style of writing.
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thanks, I'm glad you like it. X
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