pages flutter
as covetous eyes
eat each gorgeous letter
of the mythos that marches
across the fresh papyrus
to pore over--to get
closer to the
creator
Author notes
Lipograms are a lot harder than they may appear. They are texts that exclude a particular letter or particular letters of the alphabet. This one does not contain any of the following letters: w, i, n, d
“Poetry is the impish attempt to paint the color of the wind.”
--Maxwell Bodenheim
Please tell me what you think
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Good
I like it
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I like how you described someone reading a bible. I like the picture your words created in my mind's eye. It took me to a grassy field with a young woman sitting crossed legged with her bible open in her lap and the wind rustling the pages. I am also enjoying the quotes that you have started to put in your Author Comments. Thanks for the smiles and warm, fuzzy feelings that this poem produce within me.
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Very nicely written. Smooth imagery and flow. Love it. I like the form you use, the lipograms. Each time you add the author notes. Love it.
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Very nice. I like the first two lines best
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“There is nothing but water in the holy pools. I know, I have been swimming there. All the gods sculpted of wood or ivory can’t say a word. I know, I have been crying out to them. The Sacred Books of the East are nothing but words. I looked through their covers one day sideways. What Kabir talks of is only what he has lived through. If you have not lived through something, it is not true.” ~ Kabir
Attempt and accomplish you will...
♥ ~ c
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I am too lazy to write lipograms ...
for I will trip over the letters not knowing it.
YOUR poems are so perfect. How do you keep your Muse at bay?
LOVELY work, and so creative. AND: I loved the message.
Myra
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I wish that keeping my muse at bay was a problem. She sort of comes and goes at will, but while here she oftens stays a few days before moving on... Thanks for stopping by!
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absolutely magnificent!
I love the comment by Bodenheim you added in the author's notes.
The shape, style, and gentle alliteration of this really hit me as being spur-of-the-moment, deliberate perfection. I don't know if that makes sense, but it seems as though you deliberately choose words and styles that are perfect, yet appear to have been written with ease. Or, rather, you make the most difficult of tasks seem so thoughtless for you.
You're a genius.
I love the subject, too!
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Very well done. I liked it a lot. Although I will have to ask you to change the title, due to it breaking Rule 2
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Grrr...I was being so careful too. Thanks for catching that.
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