With a brushstroke, a line is drawn;
a subtle enhancement to a life lived on a razorblade.
How heart wrenching it is when the stubborn soul refuses to bend,
rather choosing to lie in the quicksand of staid resilience.
And, yet, something must have intrigued me;
an aura of danger, or perhaps rebellion.
He can take my heart, my inner peacefulness,
and ravage it to shreds;
a sweet torture that turns into a caress
emphasizing the unity of our lives.
In unison we carry on, the pain savage, yet unable to halt the hurt.
Blissfully, aware that nothing changes, we sink into the patterns
formed by unwillingness to yield; destined to suffer for our choices.
We live in a circle of events that will twist eternally.
©2007
Author notes
Word Bank
subtle, enhancement, razorblade, wrenching, stubborn, quicksand, intrigued, aura, peacefulness, ravage, torture, caress, unison, savage, eternally
Written for the contest: Wordbank (gotta do it, I won a damn PIF that I entered without knowing it was a damn PIF! ~shaking head~) by Tattboyspet
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2367256
A contest entry
- Wordbank (gotta do it, I won a damn PIF that I entered without knowing it was a damn PIF! ~shaking head~) by Tattboyspet.
400 points, ended September 4, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A critical comment is invited
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This poem makes me very happy that I stopped into read it because it is outstanding you penned a wonderful poem very good
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Well, I am happy you stopped by. It is always amazing what different people come up with, using the same words. Come back, any time.
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this is a pretty kick ass piece of poetry...I enjoyed reading it a lot
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Thank you for commenting. I am glad you like it.
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"And, yet, something must have intrigued me;
an aura of danger, or perhaps rebellion." - it's true isn't it? There's always that touch of danger that intrigues a woman ... we truly ARE strange
Thank you - I enjoyed this one - great job!
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The contest states 15 lines - please adjust
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Sorry. I did.
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