Our twin stars you would call suns rotate in their reprise
of elliptic moons Luna and Terra dancing across the skies.
Ever since the super nova that caused our galaxtical
change from refractive terrestrial dunes of sporatical
energy to meteoroid dust clouds that clog lifecycles
we have toured constellations on the outter rims universal.
Our basic religion of Draco-Asterism allows for such
jaunts not tampering with the primative lives we touch.
One day we'll find the divine Syzygy who has the cure.
Till then as celestial beings of standing we go on for sure
dining on hydrogen-nitrogen rich diets of young comets tails
and anti matter of astroid colonies using our solar sails.
One day we to shall retun to our home rejoicing in Pleiades
our capital where all life stems from in begining Hyades.
none has every lay eyes on more a beauty there in she be.
More's pity only in repose can we again reenter her arms
laying again on the warm banks of the water of home and sea
Author notes
I thinks I made a fairt attenpt to use 10 words of your list
A contest entry
- Round one of four by Fire Opal, grannyeri, jess09stevenson, x Empathic Rose x, and IndividualEleven. by IndividualEleven.
800 points, ended September 8, 2007, 14 entries
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Comments
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Good write, like the rhymes and flow, poetic and almost story like, well done, theme was good, saw some questions and thoughts in there, and word bank was mostly good, thought your use of syzygy was incorrect, but the rest I could see the metaphore in, good work and thanks for entering!
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short but to the point
short, but well written
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