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This Broken Heart

I'm slowly getting through this day
Just barely pushing through
I wish I didn't have to go
Because I still love you

Years have passed, and not a word
Although I've tried to call
Love will never change a thing
Love had made my fall

I'm barely getting past these days
I fear I can't push through
But I will wait for one more thing...
This broken heart belongs to you

Author notes

i moved halfway across the country a couple of years ago, and i had many close friends... some closer than others... the truth is, ive tried, but i was never able to get ahold of any of my friends (at least for longer than five minutes)

I know this was an old poem... but it seemed good for this contest... i picked option 3

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  • Walk-Free
    December 31, 2007

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    What a touching write.

    It must be tough, moving..

    But the truest friends stick with you through thick or thin, i guess.

    thanks for this


  • Nostalgia
    September 21, 2007

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    Emotional. I agree, not your best, but who can always be at their best all the time? Still, a very engaging write. Love your work, and hope you get your poetic muse flowing! *Still lovely piece*


    Gloria-


  • realist07
    September 15, 2007

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    Lost ok everyone has had a broken heart but show why yours was the worst paint a picture use words give me a flow let me feel the flatline of your heart ya know


  • CatastrophicSmile
    September 15, 2007

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    I think this poem is really good. My favorite line is
    "I'm barely getting past this day
    I know I can't push through
    But I will wait for one more thing...
    This broken heart belongs to you

    I feel this way every day, and it's not the greatest place to be.
    There is so much meaning in it, and it really isn't that short. Words mean more than how long it is. I love this poem.


  • AddictiveTRUTH
    September 11, 2007

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    I know you indicated

    rushing this, but you have a good heart and it still showed thru this entry. Thanks so much for still deciding to share with us. I really like it
    Ephiphany


  • Madison Mary
    August 31, 2007

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    This is so sad, but poetic brilliance at it's best. Yet another masterpiece...and I certainly don't see anything going downhill. I love the emotion...the heart...the soul you always put into your poetry. Keep up the amazing work.
    Madison xoxo


  • lost-in-yesterday
    August 31, 2007
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    i really like this. i guess its cuz of the relatability. i love it


    • Lost Memory
      August 31, 2007
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      Thanks ^^... i wrote it in a rush last night... is there anything wrong with it?


      • lost-in-yesterday
        August 31, 2007
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        no i dont think so i love it. it flows perfect i cant see a damn thing wrong with it. great job!

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