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Window to my past

Cold and stark my world of darkness
Broken by the patter of my falling tears
Through broken glass I have crawled
Painful splinters a reminder of my prison

Half in half out escape so near yet so far
A tap tap reminds me of the urgency
Ignoring the tears I pull my way free
Falling from a wall less window frame

To a dusty rubbish encrusted floor
Looking around I have no idea where I am
But anything is better then the place I was
But why is the distant tapping getting closer

I get up and run through the only open door
And straight into her that stole me from life
The old crone and her bleeding cane
My circle of insanity is now complete
My mind is a window with no walls

And the crone is me.

Author notes

Entrance to another world. by ~Danielll

The picture to me look like my past, crawling out a hole into hell...took along time to find some sort of peace and freedom. but everyone see's somethign different do they not.

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  • Dragons Lady
    September 7, 2007

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    An interesting take on the picture. I saw it before and didn't comment then. I do remember the picture. I love the imagery your words bring to mind. Wonderfully written. A type of "mirror, mirror" feel. Well done.

  • Dobar Dan
    September 2, 2007

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    hello there

    very good write - kind of sad - the flow is great even thogh the rhyme is not there - the word poem to me means its supposed to rhyme - oh well glad to hear you are overcoming the stuggles in your life - we all have demons we have to wrestle with in this life - keep on keeping on - Bless God - Joe


  • moon2u
    August 31, 2007
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    This is very interesting writing
    I love the concept
    good luck

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 31, 2007

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    This is a very good write. I like it all but for some reason these lines pop out at me:
    My circle of insanity is now complete
    My mind is a window with no walls
    And the crone is me.
    Goodluck in the contest.Best Wishes