Within the deep dark rose
The shadows are melding
His hot breath is misting
His desire building
The black lace scarf
Wrapped tightly there
Contrasting skin
Lily and fair
Little red welts
Scatter her plain
Fingers and thorns
Shower the pain
Eyes holding glass
Her head bent back
Mouth opened wide
Spine curved and slack
Punished once again
'Cause she is so “Bad”
Her heart skipping beats
For fun he has had
Then once she is scolded
He takes her hard and fast
Her moans ending loudly
His release coming last
Author notes
first and last stanza's 6 syllables
Second to last is 5
and all others have 4....
Option is 4.
In a list
A contest entry
- TONS OF OPTIONS!!! Please enter and give it a try, I want a lot more entries! by perfectsunset.
450 points, ended September 7, 2007, 63 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A chance for gold by Virgoan.
500 points, ended September 24, 2007, 49 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-writes & Fresh Writes Welcome Here! by LadyUnique.
300 points, ended January 17, 2008, 65 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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sensual with a dash of bad-girl thrown in. there's something about bad-girls and bad-boys
good rhyme too 
thank you for entering and best of luck
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Very beautiful, and amazing. Wonderful imagery, delighted in your rhyming thank you for sharing
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Very very good write here, thank you for entering
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im a member in silvos group viewing while i have time you did a awesome job in this piece here i love be awaken by something fresh absorving a new
this was most definately a great piece of lemon lime twist
take care
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Intriguingly beautiful. Well done
Thanks so much for sharing and I wish you all the best in the contest. Keep writing fellow poet.
>>>VIRGOAN
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**shocked** ummmm, delicious punishment come to mind when i read this. everything flowed great. there is really no critism that i have, except, write more of this! yay!
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I don't know what it is today, but I keep reading poems that make me need cold showers... At least the water heater will be glad for the break... This is awesome Jessa!
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Roses.. always a good subject to write about.
Well done, I liked it.
The rhyming was good, too.
Best of luck in your contest.
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Wow this piece was amazing!!! The rhyming scheme was great, and the whole poem flowed so beautifully. My fav. lines were " The black lace scarf
Wrapped tightly there
Contrasting skin
Lily and fair" Wonderful sensual write, not overly nor underly done. Best of luck, and thanks for entering my contest
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Great illusion in this poem, very great write. You got my vote. Great luck in your above listed contest. Keep updating on our groups webpage, so I can read them as they pop out
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