The Feeling I get
When i look at you
Forces me to think
To Dream
To want
To hunger
but I'm not to hear a word you say
You always keep me away
The Feeling I Get
When you and I met
You pushed me away
Forgot didnt even care
You promised but forgot
Left with a word
Loved it when we talked about swords
and yet you forgot that feeling that you get
A contest entry
- The Second Battle of the Poets Contest! by Previn.
540 points, ended September 6, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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THis is the one I've chosen for the contest... I like it, it reminds me of myself...
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hey this poem is really good... its a really good poem
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hmmm...
this is good. full of real life essence and feeling. i like the "To dream to want to hunger" beautiful
good write. ♥K -
Hm..this poem leaves one dwelling on it and the meaning. It seems like some words are just a little confusing, like something I'd expect from a forced ryhme but without the rhyme. I'm not sure. But it's a good poem
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*smile*
very nice thou i did get a bit lost. but other wise it was a very good write. I enjoyed it very much. -
Interesting if a bit weird.
the ending is different, I'll admit.
Thanks for the entry.
not sure what option this fits.
regards
Previn -
I've no idea which option this fits into, and a few rules have been ignored. I'll comment again if you fix this. (btw, very good!)
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Nice
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thnx its bout one of my friends
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