A way to put my pen to paper, a way to say how I feel.
I can say that I’m angry and hurt.
I want to say that I’ll be ok, without you by my side.
But I can’t write that, as it will all be lies.
You taught me the importance of being happy within myself.
You told me you loved me, even when we fought.
All that seems so long ago, now you’re moving away.
Ill write you say, we will keep in touch.
You will see everything will be fine.
Our bond will never die.
I feel as if my mind has turned to mush, and my tears will never run dry.
But I just have to stand tall, and remember those time we shared.
You my very treasured friend.
A contest entry
- 6 Options-Come and see, I know you want to! by WonderingForever.
1200 points, ended October 23, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Looking For Ap Family by TheLostGirl.
525 points, ended October 23, 2007, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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To be honest dear daughter, I must agree with the others: "A way to put my pen to paper, a way to say how I feel.
I can say that I’m angry and hurt."
That was the best section of the poem to me. It seems you lost the reader in 'plainspeak' without the imagery or metaphors you so elegantly began with.
But, with a little change here and there this could really fly!
~Mstrss" -
I adore the first and second line they make a stament of the indescribable nature of the relationship. This is a good write thank you for entering.
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This is a really good poem. My favorite lines would have to be: A way to put my pen to paper, a way to say how I feel.
I can say that I’m angry and hurt.
I want to say that I’ll be ok, without you by my side.
But I can’t write that, as it will all be lies.
Good luck in the contest!
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