She whimpers as
She trudges through snow
She wants to be inside
But where can she go?
She walks down the road
Her eyes on her feet
Her steps start to slow
When she starts down the street
Houses on both sides
Unwelcoming sight
They all turn her away
When she ask for a bite
She can't feel her legs
She wants to sit down
A sob wells up
A tear hits the ground
A strong wind blows
She holds her rags tighter
All of the elements
Seem to fight her
Her frostbitten fingers
She can't feel anymore
She drags herself up to
one final door
Again turned away
To die on the street
An unwanted child
rags on her feet
Author notes
You are my sunshine, my only sunshine
you make me happy, when skys are grey
you'll never know dear, how much i love you
so please don't die, and fade away
A contest entry
- For Poets with 5 or Less Trophys by Starz of Heaven.
550 points, ended September 6, 2007, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me cry by xHeartofDarknessx.
300 points, ended September 21, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - please enter this by deadheartedkitty.
375 points, ended October 24, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Thank you for taking the time enter and good luck to you!
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error: When she ask for a bite
Check your rhyme. This was an okay poem. Perhaps, that's because I'm not too fond of rhyme.
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Very Well Writen
it was very hard to decided the winner
but all in all evan though you were all very good
and hope you will enter my next contest comeing soon
so i am now saying tank you for takeing part in my first contest
Kepp up the good work
Thanks
xBx
The Ending
"Again turned away
To die on the street
An unwanted child
rags on her feet"
Made me feel so sad
Loved Every Word of this
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This is a very sad poem, but extremely well written. Excellent use of ryhming, and not overdone! Thanks selinda!
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This is an amazing write. It is sad and full of emotion.If you would please put your username in your Authors box for me.Goodluck in the contest.Best Wishes
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Wow, this is really great, reminds me of an old Dolly Parton song, I think it was called me & little andy. You told such a vivid, sad story, and your rhyme is great. Awesome write!
♥
whisper
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