Drama, lies, friends, and tears.
These are events of our teenage years.
Loving life at it's worst.
Fights with friends unrehearsed.
Together forever, we are here to stay
To say goodbye that fateful day.
Stuck in the middle, between old and new.
Our sight at life and love askew.
We stay together through love and fear.
These are events of our teenage years.
A contest entry
- Your Favourite Poem (for prewrites only) by Seeking Peace.
450 points, ended September 8, 2007, 61 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your BEST Prewrite! - For Mike [degarmo] - by Never Fall in Love.
950 points, ended October 29, 2007, 130 entries
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DQ’d because requested corrections not made.
This is poignant and angsty (my own word) and I like it.
I do have two suggestions: : what would you say to changing
“Our sight at life” to “Our view of life” and putting an ‘s’
on ‘fear’ at the end of the 9th line? Let me know if you change
it so I may look at it again. Thanks.
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WOO!
Wow I loved it it was increadibly amazing so true about teenage years!
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This is good. The rhyme and flow were spot on and let the wors slip out of the mouth very easily. Teenage years - the best times of my life even though so many negative effects have happened and much more.. not gonna go into detail about that!
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
Never ♥ -
Oh yeh!
Hey!
Thanks for the comment
means a lot..
I read over my poem and i know what you mean by adding 'me' after hurt..
it works so much better
thanks x
I really like this poem its amazing .. and true lol..
I'm going to read more
x
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Yep this seems to well and truly descirbe todays teenangers... I am long past this point, but you have captured this perfectly
Thank you for taking the time to enter your favourite prewrite in this contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen -
True, freakin true. That's all I've gotta say.
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i like this, tis so true, which is really sad that we teenagers suck this much..but there you have it.
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i love this this is tottally the teenage years wrapped up into 10 simp;e lines
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You've got it down exactly right here. Very nice rhyming and flow too. I do like how you've made sure to include that we stay together through it all.
Very cute,
Bandaid.
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wow. i really like this poem. its true too. <3 it u have a wide vocab too
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thanks, not too bad for an eigth grader huh?
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this is really cute
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thanks
This website is like my nwe addiction.
haha wayyy better than myspace. i'm inspired to write more poems now thanks!
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i like this poem and it is so true...great poem....good job!!
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thanks
thanks for taking time to read my poetry
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