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Joyride

I can't be there for you,
So don't be there for me.
You're in my heart and everything I do.
I just can't let you see
that I really truly care.
So I just stay away.
Though I want to see you every day.

You want a poem.
I have no time.
I pour my heart between the lines.
I want to let you know I care,
and that I never want you to there.
In my heart,
a fucked up place,
I'll never save for you a space.

Don't stand by me through thick or thin.
I HATE YOU.
Can't let you in.
Fight the demons inside,
[the lies] I hide.
Keep you safe,
from a place,
that’s truly there.
Even though I wonder where.
Keep your love to you your own damned self.
I never, ever want your help.

I‘ll never want to let you go,
I'd just want for you to know:

They pull, they twist, they turn, the break.
But it's not my heart they choose to take.
They leave me here.
I shiver.
Fear.

Can't stand to let you wither away.
I want to see you everyday.
Decompose.
Without haste.
Every one knows.
You weren’t my taste.

I never loved you never cared even though you were always there.

PUSH.
PULL.
TWIST.
This knife.
Deep inside.
Scar you forever there.
A smile upon my face I’ll wear.

Deeper cuts, nine more times,
it's your name I curse out to the lines.

Cut deeper,
don't you fear,
the ambulance will soon be here.

A contest entry

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  • LovelyHippie
    December 10, 2007
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    nice. good luck on the contest


  • BigE
    December 6, 2007

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    I thought the poem had no smoothness to it. I understand the pain, the conflict, but the rough beat and the worn-out theme gave me the impression that this poem lacks the depth of a brilliant one. Thanks for entering.

    Steven


  • Brandoninloveandlies
    November 8, 2007
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    Gnarly

    I really liked itt i just cant described why but i just love it it is a good poem

  • EdibleRoses
    September 3, 2007
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    "I pour my heart between the lines."

    And yay for ambulances.
    They've ruined my fucking life.


    • no-way-ap
      September 3, 2007
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      thanks.

      how did ambulances mess up your life? You're like the second one to post a comment on this poem, so thanks alot. The other person siad it was too cliche` . but i was writing form the heart.

      • EdibleRoses
        September 4, 2007
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        Ambulances save lifes. I'm pro-death. It fucks up the lives of everyone, because natural order is to die when you're supposed to.

        Sometimes things come out as cliche` but they aren't really. It's only cliche` when there's no meaning behind it.

        • no-way-ap
          December 2, 2008
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          hmm. looking back.....

          if an ambulance comes to save you, then you were MEANT to be saved, right?

          • EdibleRoses
            December 4, 2008
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            looking back...

            If an ambulance comes to save you, you were meant to die, but got saved due to technology. Which is currently killing the earth so there ya go. XD


            • no-way-ap
              December 5, 2008
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              hmm,

              butttt.... if it WAS your time to go, you go. and if you dont, it does fuck up the balance of shit...and if you're NOT meant to die, that's what ambulances are for. technology was meant to be, and thif it's killing the earth, the that's what's supposed to happen.

              i just wonder what happens when thing aren't in balance.

              • EdibleRoses
                December 5, 2008
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                The forces try to make up for it, and set things back in balance.


        • no-way-ap
          September 4, 2007
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          Thanks.

          iunderstand. i Totally agree with yuo about the ambulances. i mean everyword i write.


  • Play Pretend.
    September 2, 2007
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    hmm... liked it till the end...a bit to cliche.
    but fairly good.

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