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The Race

All crouched at the starting line
Racing for what is so divine
Each of us numbered, like a day of the week
Seeing our futures within a few feet

Staring at each other with bloodshot eyes
Waiting for that one small chance to arise
Sweat dripping out of every last pore
All reaching for that one perfect score

On the stand the emerald flag drops
We take off fast as each heart stops
Two, three, four at a time
Watching as the meters climb

First one around the bend,
The meter descends,
Then once again as fast as he can
Just as the others are making a stand

My heart begins pumping
The meter is jumping
I need to go fast
I just can not be last

Around the next bend, I pick up the speed
A little bit faster, that’s all that I need
Second in line, almost there
Passed up by someone with a little more flare

A race to the finish, it’s all in plain sight
The trophy on stand gleaming bright
All crunched together, just ‘til the end
I picked up speed before the last bend

Cross over the finish and to my surprise
The race was life, and death was the prize
To race for so long, for the ultimate end
Makes us race faster along that last bend

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  • Beating gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    wow! what a great way of putting life into a bigger perspective! I really enjoyed this piece, because the rhyming and rythm was really good. It was so easy to read. And that last stanza just added depth to it. Good job!


  • ExpectingMommy18
    October 25, 2007

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    i agree with jcat,you did a great job with this peice.
    good luck in the contest and thank you for entering


  • jcat gold member
    October 24, 2007

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    great reminder to slow down and enjoy life.. great poem good rhyming. good luck in the contest and thank you for entering


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 24, 2007
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    Great Poem Brings back memories, This poem makes you feel like your really running great job.


  • Mezclita
    October 12, 2007

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    yup very true... you've got to go slowly enough to take things in... coz life's a journey afterall... thank u 4 the piece!


  • weebabycole
    October 12, 2007
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    good poem

    like the way youve compared life and a race really good x


  • cali951
    October 9, 2007

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    Wow great poem I really enjoyed it the race of life yes I will win this poem probably will inspire a lot of people to look at life like a race well good job and good luck in my contest

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