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Broken Apart [PROSE]

He doesn't know what he's doing when he pushes me away and tells me it's over, no more, we are through. It's like everything I've ever lived for has just came crashing down before me and I'm just trapped in a building thats fallen. Shards of glass littering the floor of my heart, bricks unsteady and toppling [like my sanity]. It would all be alright if he'd just have given me another chance, seen that these words were the truth, the real thing, love.
I tried my best to express each and every piece of my heart to the man who tore each and every part of it into tiny little fabricated nothings. I tried to give him something of me, to show him that love is endless and it lives in me, but only for him.

It's a shame those who you need to listen to you, are the ones who will never open an ear to you. I guess love falls on deaf ears as well as blind eyes.

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♥Prose♥

Hope it's OK. Sad, but it's what came to me, hope it's what you're looking for or near enough to it.

prose & heartache really.
I hope it's ok. Do tell me.

x Empathic Rose x

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  • whiterabbit.
    February 13, 2008

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    I really like this and the imagery is wonderful. I can tell from the way that you write that you have a lot of talent. It's sadly true that often the people we need to listen to us are the ones that don't. Great job and thanks for your entry.


  • Ilma
    December 30, 2007
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    This is a very good piece of writing. I love the imagery you use, particularly ' Shards of glass littering the floor of my heart, bricks unsteady and toppling [like my sanity]', and also the final sentence. The emotion you feel is reflected in your words and I love it. Thank you for entering and good luck. Hannu xx


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    September 10, 2007

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    thank you for sharing this beautiful write with me. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


    ps--congratulations on the bronze trophy.


  • Hell In Harmony
    September 6, 2007
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    I loveedd the ideas here.
    though I think some could have been worded better

    It's a shame those who you need to listen to you, are the ones who will never open an ear to you. I guess love falls on deaf ears as well as blind eyes.

    Loved that part!
    =]
    Thank you and goodluck!
    Kat


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    August 31, 2007

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    to be honest i don't know what to say but this is a wonderfully written poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    this was a wonderful write so heartfelt and deep
    it was just
    wonderfully written
    well done and best of luck


  • forbidden-colour
    August 30, 2007

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    I'm just trapped in a building thats fallen. Shards of glass littering the floor of my heart, bricks unsteady and toppling [like my sanity].

    ^ a powerful image created there!
    thank you for entering!

    x

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