Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Whirling, leaping, stomping feet
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Elegant, graceful and oh-so-fleet
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Men and women move as one
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Don’t leave now, it’s just begun
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Twisting, turning, gaining speed
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
The Lord steps out, begins to lead
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Taps a challenge with his shoes
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Knows the dark one won’t refuse
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Sure enough, he can’t resist
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Mimes the Lord but adds a twist
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Back and forth the dancing goes
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
Faster, faster, never slows
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
The Lord takes over, feet a blur
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
At his finish, all concur
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
The Lord has won this dancing duel
Ratta tatta ratta tatta rat tat tat
And Goodness once again does rule.
Author notes
I saw Lord of the Dance tonight and was so awed by the sheer majesty and grace of the performance taht I HAD to write something. The 'rat a tat' rhythm of the tap dancing was stuck in my head, so this is what came out. Hope you enjoy! (And if you ever get the chance to see Lord of the Dance, take it. It's worth it.)
Written September 19th, 2003
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A contest entry
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I feel this would be better read in two line intervols. Just my opinion on the form. Other than that, I've seen that dancing, and even the show, and this does fall in-line with it.
A nice piece that you have written here.
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Great!
This is so clever, and full of fancy and wonder for me. I love the art of tapping, although my feet trip over air so I have never... I did see Lord of The Dance and River Dance, and even STOMP had tap in it. The beat is awesome, and I never got bored with the tap in this poem. I loved the rhythm clear to the end, and I know for me "Goodness" is the victor, and the devil is mad as he taps his way to hell.
Great visuals and flow!
Thanks for helping my creative writing class students out with your great comments. They wil enjoy. I am going to print all the comments and post them on the wall in their class. I can't wait. Thanks again. I will let you know of their progress, I am sure they will grow by leaps and bounds from all the responses. Thanks agan!
Much Love,
Renee
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Hey we do think along the same lines haha... did u know i really do irish dance though???? no not like lord of the dance thats just showy.. anyway to the poem.. ahem...i love how you put good and bad and such and i dont wanna bore you with HOW GREAT this poem is an all... great write!!!! bbye...!
~Shay -
I love lord of the dance - this is a very creative way to describe it I really enjoyed this and could picture the dancing in my head.. as well as the sound! yay for onomotopoeia .. yeah I think that's how you spell it >.>
do come see me sometime
~Scarlet
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Ah, okay you commented on my poem and I said I'd return comments... and when I got to your page this was up and well.. I did tap dance for about 7 years so I was immediately drawn to it and I love how you did it. I can totally imagine this being read in a darker place in a certain way...wow. I thought the ratta tatta rat tat tat line would get really old but if read properly it's actually a very good effect. Perhaps nearer the end the lines can stop because the end is coming and near the end of a dance you notice that it ends with a bang.. not the same thing that's been happening. I've seen Lord of the Dance.. and Riverdance-they are both very, very good. Just really awesome job with this. God Bless
~Kim~ -
good, but improvable
odd that you'd turned the battle between good and evil into a tap dancing contest. i see where the context comes from, but i prefer to steer clear of these kind of metaphors. i think it's a very good poem, but could improve with less "ratta tatta" lines.
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