Life is a poem that always ends in death
When the ink is gone there's nothing left
I lived my life
And I watched it end
But I'll breathe through this poem
I'll survive death
My words are immortal
And thus I have become
What can take it away from me
Nothing, and no one
Life is a moment that always ends in regret
When your heart is gone there's nothing left
I had your love
And I watched it end
I'll bleed on this poem
I'll paint my death
These words mean nothing
As I'm coming undone
What can make me whole again
Nothing and no one
Life is a grave, you dig your own death
I can't escape eternal rest
But I'll be just fine
Knowing this is the end
I'll sleep forever
When there's nothing left
I love this poem, but please give me your honest opinion.
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this is so beautiful and true. i can't believe that you can make the dark, sad truth look so golden and beautiful! i love how you wrote everything and had poetry and life so wonderfully entwined. GREAT JOB!
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Very deep,dark and intense.
My first impression is that if this is a real person being portrayed by these words they need a lot of understanding and support. Emotionally I feel compassion for the individual being spoken of and would like to give them a big hug and tell them that they are loved and cherished. This is not awkward to read but is so terribly sad. This nothing that needs changing. The title works with this very well. The first line starts this off real well and the last line sums this up just fine. All of this is written so very well that I can't choose a favorite part.
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Great !
I love this poem and how it is written.
When reading it you feel the strength of your words and feelings so well that it becomes scary...
I can understand that this is the way you`re feeling, but I`d like to say one thing if I see how you talk about regret... Better to regret something you have done, than to regret something you haven`t done.
I`d also like to say something about a certain part of your poem.
These words mean nothing
As I'm coming undone
What can make me whole again
Nothing and no one
These words do mean something, because they are a way out. A way to let all emotions and thoughts out that otherwise remain inside and would destroy everything there`s left. There`s also one person who can make you whole again and that`s you. Nobody else can solve your problems...
Keep writing and don`t let life get you down.
Greetz !
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