A single look can poison even the strongest of minds
So I was powerless to yours and even now it binds
Your lips they tease me with prophecies but never a kiss
If I knew you were teasing then the words I wouldn’t miss
Please take my hand my fallen angel and guide my way
Keep me wanting your touch every night and every day
All the bittersweet messages of love and devotion and need
They cast away the deadly darkness of every single deed
These words are lies only told to cover all the pain
If you knew the truth I would collapse with the shame
This is because my love for you is a broken tomb
Time is unable to heal me for I am not broken
Just dying under all of my words that are unspoken
This is because my love for you is a broken tomb
Every time is see you I don’t know what to say
It’s like the devil himself is taking my breath away
Your fingertips upon my cheek are sharp as knives
Like a soft venom that lakes many countless lives
I will wait until the end of time and longer
Just to embrace a moment so beautiful and so sombre
You have perfected the art of love in this way
A way that can drain away the light of day
These words are lies only told to cover all the pain
If you knew the truth I would collapse with the shame
This is because my love for you is a broken tomb
Time is unable to heal me for I am not broken
Just dying under all of my words that are unspoken
This is because my love for you is a broken tomb
Show me once again the world we once saw
A world so addictive that now I need more
Without pain and without heartbreak
I know it will be one place all the pain I can take
These words are lies only told to cover all the pain
If you knew the truth I would collapse with the shame
This is because my love for you is a broken tomb
Time is unable to heal me for I am not broken
Just dying under all of my words that are unspoken
This is because my love for you is a broken tomb
Author notes
PHANTOM OF DESPAIR
A contest entry
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525 points, ended September 7, 2007, 14 entries
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Comments
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Wow...
Now, I think this is very well penned! It could be a song.
Well done!
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Repetative.this caught me more of a song than a poem.But it's really good!
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is this intended to be a song ?? if so it's very well written but for a poem it is quite repetative but beyond that i enjoyed reading this a lot and i'm extatic that you entered it in my contest. i really like the way you twisted the lines together and made the poem flow very well i'm pleased with this and again thank you for entering and the best of luck to you
lil
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Wow this was beautiful. I can very much relate to this. Good Job, Thanks for Entering and Good Luck.
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WOW
great poem i really liked it great job
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Fantastic!!
This is an awesome write! It has a fab flow and many can relate to the words you've weaved. The 2 lines....
Every time is see you I don’t know what to say
It’s like the devil himself is taking my breath away
Stood out for me, I so remember feeling like that and you have put it in an excellent way Superb. Best of luck in the contest! -
This works as lyrics!
You've certainly got the rephrane of a "broken tomb"!
Thanks for your entry & Good Luck!
Tang
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i really like all the metaphores youdid a really great job with this peice
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This would be a great song. That's what it kind of reminds me of. I really like it and it is full of great emotion.
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very good...i like how you repeated the thought of a broken tomb, and how you restrained yourself from using it too much...the rhyme scheme seemed a little offbeat in some parts, but the over all piece was really good
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this is more dark than sad hun but thanks for entering! -
very good write. thanks for entering my contest.
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this is a very good poem. even though i did see some misspelled words. other than that it is very good. thank you for your entry and good luck in my contest!
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