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A Walk in the Park

A walk in the park my first mistake
Out of nowhere a crunching blow
Agony then darkness now I learn true suffering
My screams are silent my lips wired shut
Full of a foul lingering taste of old semen

Seems like days, weeks since my world ended
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When I tried to open my eyes I got my first taste
Silently tasting and choking on my own words
Greeted with disjointed darkness flavored in agony
My lips feel swollen, my tongue is a bleeding stump
I taste metal and feel it being ground into my flesh

Arching twisting trying to get free brings more pain
-|-
Naked I'm being eaten alive I can feel something

Feverish salt cakes my tormented flesh
Once lively now bloated erupting foul smelling blood
And Against it’s will my heart beats on
I can feel the hooks pulling my flesh taunt

A whisper...hush now you are mine forever

-|-
Torn from the living eaten from within
Leaking tendrils of sickness from pores
Aching sockets leak corrupted blood
Inflamed skin cracked dying outside in
Goblets of yellow puss drip with stench,
Great dripping mounds of rupturing waste
Broken and tortured endurance failing

-|-
Buzzing flies crawl upon my wasteland

Leaving their squiring deposits to feast
Maggots drilling through my veins

Pure wretchedness swims through my soul
My blood burns with disease dying to slowly
Gums crawling continuously bleed
And yet my Fucken my heart ticks on
-|-
This is his tapestry my withered existence

My misery leaks from my swelling shell
Covered in gangrenous breaching sores
I exist yet wish and for an illusion of end
Continuous agony rips through my body
He comes and goes whispering soon...soon

Gurgling mumbles kill me...not yet...he whispers
Madness seethes within my tortured sorrow
A walk in the park my first and last mistake.

Author notes

Somewhat long, its been awhile since Ive written this way, so not sure if it will meet your standards, if not then Dq, no worries, other days other times to improve on hell.
I Tend to write on the first person view of the tortured.

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  • the oleander
    December 17, 2007

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    Amazing, pure suspense, I loved it so much, I was even inspired to draw the images you described thats how powerful your imagry was, props. until we meet again,
    Autumn (ps. feel free to message me if you desire)

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    I will be sleeping with every light on in my house tonigt I want my Teddy but you mutalated him last week . This is a very awesome write. Goodluck in the contest, Best wishes


  • Dragons Lady
    August 30, 2007

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    OMG. I think you've outdone yourself on this version of hell. This one was just gory, I mean really gross. This one made me shiver, the thought of being eaten from the inside out. Wonderful imagery, very detailed right down to the final words. Well done. Good luck in the contest.


  • moon2u
    August 30, 2007

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    Omg! I was shivering as I read this one...
    this would make a good horror flick for sure.

    Naked I'm being eaten alive I can feel something

    Feverish salt cakes my tormented flesh
    Once lively now bloated erupting foul smelling blood
    And Against it’s will my heart beats on
    I can feel the hooks pulling my flesh taunt

    A whisper...hush now you are mine forever

    -|-

    this part really got to me...being eaten alive! yipes!