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Stolen Thoughts

 


 

She can't remember now, how she stole him
from you;
Solotkin, your museful russian
with muscle and brawn
stretched his vocal chords and swam under
his searing gaze.
smelled the tobacco and turkish coffee on his breath
brilliantine hair, shiny and bright


the damp blue of Manchester

on his overcoat, like slick tarmac and night

time:

remembers

how he let Angeline twist
around  his fingers and mind
how the word Fuck,

sounded so Russian
& so important, to them

on reading Baudelaire, naked

sat in the upstairs window seat




words sit and ambivalence
strode in,
in the backwash of his
embrace, he held her


watching them both
on the corner of Tib Street
just up from GlamourPussy
and the chip shop,
greasy kisses near the Old Market

gates, to another secret universe

She ponders 'pon time

and with accents thick with smoke & brass

she hears the chatter



all but gone
forgotten to some

to some, thoughts can be stolen

& plumed into a poet's hand

 

 

 

 

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  • A60sMan
    September 26, 2007

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    I really, really enjoyed reading this piece. The second stanza being especially strong, IMO. I kind of saw you morphing a female Lennon ... "Penny Lane" slipped into the back of my brain. Well worth the read.

    A60sMan


  • MuddyKing
    September 22, 2007

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    the GlamourPussy stanza was worth the price of admission..lol...you always let us see into your world with such vivid imagery. You make me miss England everytime I read from the musings series and I think it fitting you entered one here.
    I have to start reading my favorites more...perhaps I'll quit the contests and concentrate more on reading. This entry is a reason for just that.
    excellent
    contender
    peace and hugs
    Muddy


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 8, 2007

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    "words sit and ambivalence
    strode in,
    in the backwash of his
    embrace, he held her......"

    Dammmnnn. Lady, you can "steal" anyone's thoughts any ol' time at all & no one would ever consider prosecuting...'cause you made 'em so much more grand than they were before, stuck in anyone else's head. Ummm...in other words...I liked this one a lot, my Friend. Good luck in Richard's contest, Sweetie. Wanda


  • cvillelisa
    September 7, 2007

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    Such a timelessness. Here then Now, love that.

    I'd probably lose the ellipses and tighten up the spacing but that is purely personal and definitely your "style" so probably they should all stay.

    I was reading in Rolling Stone this morning about a new Joy Division movie coming out -- have you heard?

    Good luck in the contest.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      September 7, 2007
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      yupp

      should be a good film and lots of filming in Manchester again...

      which is grand


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 7, 2007

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    Wow,

    You sure do paint some potent poetry within each line of vivid imagery. I really was drawn into it with the use of word choice, and wonderful style and flow. Thanks for sharing poetess. All the best to you in this contest, a really good piece here!

    Peace, Timothy


  • misselaineous
    September 3, 2007
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    bravo


  • Stats
    September 1, 2007

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    Wowzer !!

    "plumed into a poet's hand" Its that kind of word play that is so profound i think, pieces like this brighten up the day. Thanks for sharing. C. X

  • Rowan gold member
    August 31, 2007

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    damn this is fine.
    That ending left me with my mouth open.
    You are one talented poet, my friend.


  • Abscessed
    August 31, 2007

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    oh wow oh wow oh wow




  • Annalise
    August 31, 2007
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    "accents thick with smoke & brass" Hot damn!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 31, 2007
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      hehehhe glad you liked that line

      brass around these parts is also slang for money....


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    August 30, 2007
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    i
    love
    it
    when
    you
    share


    marevelous

  • restful.soul
    August 30, 2007

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    WOW!!! this poem was incredible. A beautiful write with a beautiful ending. loved every word well done

  • Bad Bill
    August 30, 2007

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    Edgy, muscular poetry which is streets ahead of most stuff one reads on AP. I very much enjoyed this mature poem.

    Bill


  • IronIcecream
    August 30, 2007

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    it happens on back alleys of strife
    you’ll find it at the bottom of
    once a full bottle or glass
    of fable and fabulous
    like tattooed tulips
    entitled
    le fleurs du mall

    when paradise is lost under a raincoat
    and time is scared by poppy fields

    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 30, 2007
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      swoons






    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 30, 2007
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      I think I love you.....

      hehhe ... yes

      golly... and do you do that naked, one asks???


      hello

      ermm .... all done in the best possible taste


      • IronIcecream
        August 30, 2007
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        first I remove my clothes
        then my skin, flesh bones and nerves...

        I only keep my nails
        in case I want something to bite on


  • MidnightPoet545
    August 30, 2007
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    Very well written

    Wonderful piece of work, good job


  • tara wilson gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    I always enjoy these Manchester Musings...and this one is
    just as excellent, I like how you make reference to some of the other Manchester poems in it ..
    "smelled the tobacco and turkish coffee on his breath
    brilliantine hair, shiny and bright"
    You are so amazing with detail..


  • starwing
    August 30, 2007

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    this was a very different write.... i enjoyed it...it was a bit ecclectic but still held interest throughout...peace and harmony...desi


  • Catressa gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    I felt like I should be smoking a cigar and listening to some throaty singer in a Parisian bar..

    damn good Woman..


  • La Luna Rosa
    August 30, 2007

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    Mm, you lose yourself in the poem occasionally. Of course, it is still completely beyond pretty much anything one sees on this site.


  • Star Shine
    August 30, 2007

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    "the damp blue of Manchester
    on his overcoat, like slick tarmac and night" is a line that grabs. Descriptions and images for all the senses, this would satisfy the insatiable.



  • Nicolette gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    "NurseChilly" is the perfect title for this poem because these Manchester Musings are so very you - they are you!! Loved the way your poet's hand plumed this... I may be able to steal your thoughts, but I won't be able to write it like this. Enjoyed the tour - wonderful poetry, my friend!



    ~ Nicolette


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 30, 2007
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      well it's for Muddy's contest... so the title is actually Stolen Thoughts.. but I like your view on it all

      thank you darlin


  • Woodworm
    August 30, 2007

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    Hey hey, you've got two glorious stanzas here: the backwash of his embrace, and the chip shop. Not sure that Baudelaire wants to be in the same place as the chip shop. Oh I don't know: maybe he does, it's your poem after all. Maybe Baudelaire is in the chip shop. Maybe Fleurs du Mal was inspired by eating nasty peas. I don't know about the spacing: all you modern types. I do think Joy Division should be capitalised though, definitely. Does ambivalence stride? Or does he just mooch about?


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 30, 2007
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      I think you can be naked and read Baudelaire wherever one likes to... I'd love to do it, on the corner where Afflecks Palace says ... On the Sixth day, God created MANchester... hehehheheh

      nasty peas... how very dare you!!! farts in your general direction.... savoy cabbage is my reply

      and yes.. I spose Joy Division needs that.. yes.. yes

      and ambivalence strides like a cock in Manchester... swagger

      • Woodworm
        August 30, 2007
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        Heheh. Never said owt about naked, like


        • NurseChilly gold member
          August 30, 2007
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          with a savoy cabbage covering your dignity.. or would that be the backend of an 83 ... woot

          hehehhehehe

          • Woodworm
            August 30, 2007
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            Dignity? Never heard it called that before.


            • Mulefa
              August 30, 2007
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              I got bullied in to seeing Nine Inch stupid tossing nails at the festival and they covered a joY divisiOn song and they treated it so badly I wanted to weep


              • NurseChilly gold member
                August 30, 2007
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                fucking hell...

                no no no.. that is just disgusting

                the only ones who can do their songs.. are themselves....

                OH pOopScOOp ... lololol How JOyoUs ... I thin Trent Reznor is a wanker

                but what do i know

                lolololol

                I'm actually singing my head off.. in a strange unsinging like way.. cause i can't sing.. to THIS CHARMING MAN... yayayayayyaya


                • Mulefa
                  August 30, 2007

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                  you're right he's a wanker

                  it'ssss gruesomeeee that someoneeee sooo handsomeee should ca-airrrr-ar-airrrr OWWW

                  I didn't know they wrote 'Hurt' though, and they started playing that and I got huffy and went "urgh they're going to shit all over Mr Cash now" then everyone turned at me and made me feel so so so so so so small as music geeks enjoy above all else. I fucking love it when someone dares to say Jeff Buckley wrote Hallaleighahahwhajah - everyone looks at them like they're the most meaningless, ignorant, most disposable germ on the planet. It's so violent. At least it's not too shameful not knowing about stupid NIN though.


                  • NurseChilly gold member
                    August 30, 2007
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                    true... very true..

                    even for an old bat like me...

                    although Mr Cash was much more supreme

                    did you know that Martooni who used to write on here.. of SS thingi.. used to jam guitars with Trent Reznor and his dad... ... he lives near them....

                    lol .. useless bit of info there... lololol

                    NIN NIN NIN.. reminds me of Spike Milligan

            • Mulefa
              August 30, 2007
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              JOY DIVISION


              • NurseChilly gold member
                August 30, 2007
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                Joy O Joy ... the division...

                hear the mission bell ring once more in the Hacienda... gosh, those were the days

                SMILES

                SMILES

                SMILES


  • Mulefa
    August 30, 2007
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    Makes me homesick for lovely lovely Mancunia, (shhh snidey Worm I'm a proper Manc now and you know this really) Do you remember that lovely nude woman who used to "streak for peace" down Tib street? Mucky, smutty Manchester, I love you. This is a great, concretey tarmacy poem. Too right thoughts plumes themselves around, of course they do. I don't think poets deserve no capital letter on their P though really - all that Wordsworthian stuff bout poots being elevated, exalted things winds me up - but then I not really sure what a poet is at all. Yay manchester - helping Dickens, helping The Smiths, Sissay, Marx, Jackie Kay, joy division and on and on and on and helping you and even helping the one the onlyyyyyyyyyy take that write beautiful words all over the place. Woo.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 30, 2007
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      tarmacy... heheheh ... a lovely new wordyword..

      and of course you're a Manc... anyone who adopts Manchester as their true home is reet and proper...





      squished snailyfrogs to wormy for his tardiness and snideysnide snides... sniff at his puneyarsed tapirplop


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    Now I remember these people!
    from my days on night shift at the Glamourpussy (bad pay but a good discount)

    this is rich (of course)
    a thick nighttime read

    If I ever get to Manchester after reading these it will be like entering a dark theater

    I'll wear my tarmac raincoat

    I'll read Baudelaire naked in the lobby

    good one!!!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 30, 2007
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      naked huh??? well........ erm...... phones the airline now....



      book a flight..... hehhehehe


  • ca ne fait rien
    August 30, 2007
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    wild applauses

  • Suzanne Dia
    August 30, 2007

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    Someone stole my muse.
    I like reading of yours, though
    stolen or borrowed or simply inspired


    • NurseChilly gold member
      August 30, 2007
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      well steal her back....

      I do miss Miss Guin, she did have a nasty edge which was so damned beautiful.. ....

      ressurection shuffle

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