i wait for that creature
in shining underwear
to take me to places -
i don't know where.
i wait for some brave pantaloon
loon
to polka with perhaps.
i find your underwear
edible
but don't get me wrong
i quite like its cool cotton.
i decided long ago
to abandon my underwear
for the freedom
of
nothing under there.
but don't let that stop you from
trying on
my old
lacy
underwear.
it quite suits you
you know
i heard a friend mention
that the only thongs
he'd ever
wear
would be
underwear.
i've seen such things!!!
such fluffy pink things
on thongs
and i
think of him then..
my mind bends
and sees
thongs in thongs
oh dear
underwear!!
A contest entry
- ~Shining Underwear~ by Teddibly Abnormal.
600 points, ended September 20, 2007, 15 entries
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Comments
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hahahahh
the words and the font colour? i almost flew away~ thanks for entering my contest.
i loved the bits of humor (it quite suits you, you know)
!!
good luck~
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I must commend your use of alliteration in rather interesting piece and also the play with the words, 'things' and 'thongs';'pantaloon' and 'loon'.What's shining? The creature or the underwear? [Just want to interpret 'shining underwear' to mean 'a body shining from sweat' - 'edible underwear' supports my assertion.Right or wrong, you have a funny but fascinating piece here.
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lol this is cute, makes the mind wonder a few things but it's cute none the less lol best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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