The truth forsaken
A journey within my mind
Dreaming to know me
A contest entry
- Basho's echo by monkus.
950 points, ended September 19, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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congratulations on the Silver Award. Quite creative "to journey into one's own mind to get to know self" [very original]
reenie
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Very nice ...
I'd have never thought of writing a senyru for this.
Good job on it.
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thought this was wonderful on first reading and more as i reread it. thank you very much
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The last line is a tad vague. As simple as this piece is, as short as it is, the last line just seems vague, to me.
It could be me. Most times is. I think it's the use of "dreaming". Is this done while awake or asleep? Or is it just used as the principle word?
I could be seeing more than what's there. Lack of sleep does that.
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I like trying to read between the lines. I Love this poem becasue it feels like it encourages you to. A great write, keep it up!
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This is a good one.
It's the journey into the deep abyss of one's mind.
It makes me want to read more, but yet.. it explains everything.
Very well done. I liked this.
xx.
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