As winter slowly fades away into cosiness
Summer reveals warmth upon palm trees
Quiet rustle of leaves as bats make way
Screeches of joy as they come to life
Alone a man sits under Ninth Dan’s kick
Perhaps in a drunken stupor as customary
The night abruptly alters into silence
As the neighbourhood sleeps in harmony
Expectations of some drunken hostility
Realisation occurs from Thursday bores
Vacant eyes stare through a white van
Awaiting his love in hours of darkness
He waits and he lingers till early morning
As his mistress tiptoes away from kin
A mystery surrounded with love triangles
Two dark lovers of the strangest kind.
Author notes
Looking outside my window
A contest entry
- I'll Be Your Crying Shoulder ♥ Love ♥ by forbidden-colour.
530 points, ended September 22, 2007, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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♥ This is great!
Thank you for entering
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Oh my! I love the imagery you painted in this wonderful quatrain. Your word choice flows like liquid to a bitter sweet and vivid image. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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This is good, sorry it did not meet the rules for the contest, cuz the read it self was wonderful. I liked it a lot.
WEll done,
A better well said.
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hi
Your poem is wonderful...I will come back to read again. This is suppose to be 10 lines, so if you would like to try and fix it, you have a few minutes....Sorry for the misunderstanding...
I will come back by in a few minutes
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ow I misunderstood sorry i'll just forfeit the piece
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Your prompt is:
to look out your window right now
and paint me what you see .
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done
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