Nothing more
Then a failed
Experiment
Nothing more
Then a life of
Dissapointment
My life is lost
In space and time
Whats the cost
To leave it all behind
My life drained
There is no point
I am gone
No longer here
I am done
No longer care
I'm giving up
A waste of time
It was just
A perfect crime
There's just nothing
Left Of me
I am only
A broken Memory
Remove those fears
Do not cry
Dry your tears
And just let me die
A contest entry
- Random Thoughts by Random Thoughts.
1000 points, ended September 23, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A really harsh hitting and sad tale, written with intensity and purpose,
A great effort, well done and thanks for the entry, best of luck to you in the contest,
-Brenden -
All I can say is WOW WEE!!!
Ooooh you're good! keep writing feller, there's no flaw in your writing...i like it, it's terrific, it's beautiful! (dark too)....
There's just nothing
Left Of me
I am only
A broken Memory
Remove those fears
Do not cry
Dry your tears
And just let me die
wow, the ending's great...these 2 parts r nicely written...i like how you express yourself here...may be depressing but well....to me, the darker a poem gets, the more I'll read it....i stopped writing too much dark poems now that's why i am looking at others who are writing them see if i can the inspiration back...but oops...nothing's working! I guess i lost the "darkness" side of me but I admit that this poem is good! double good!
keep writing!
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Oh I love luv lurve this. Has a similar feel to the poem I just submitted to this contest. My mouse rolled easily down the page with this poem.
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I like this
I can relate "I am only a broken memory" is my fave line this is good,strong delivery!
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