I still remember
the day I smiled
Believing
all…
Hoping too...
For happiness
forever love
true…
Until my heart
gave up beating
Tired of crying,
broken…
Because my mind
knew…
this would be
the last promise…
Author notes
Oh well..Wolf Mistress..just a sad picture and a sad mind...loss...
In a list
A contest entry
- The Special Ones (Invite Only) by Beating.
600 points, ended February 17, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
My mind knew, the last promise...
Comments
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This is a wonderful poem, written with truely felt sadness. The last stanza really spoke to me, the end of promises... the end of the hopes shared.
Congratulations on the well deserved Gold trophy.
Dee
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Fantastic poem,
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You continue to amaze me sis! Your poem is really sad. I like the way you wrote it, because you left out any unnessecary words, and only the important things were there to tell the story. It became quite epic. Good job!
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Yep, just when we were thinking things can't get any worse, they do. The problem with people trying to help us when we are down is simple; they always think we are at the bottom, but there's no bottom, there's always further to fall. - Love the poem. You know Ms Wolfy the image is rather uplifting; for a sentimental guy. ---- Thank you.
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omg
do you mean I am still not at the bottom of my depression
I need to write me more...yep...so I will be there soon.......
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this is really sad...very depressing..I thought it was really good
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great piece a litle sad, but i lave reading it.
great work
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Big
for you! The picture is sad and the write even sadder. Very well written. Smile! You are so cared about!!
Jeannie
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beautifully sad twinny. great write as always you write wonderfully
Tasha
xo
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