Watching my stone across the still waters
counting the skipping steps, following the ripples
rings ever outward til touching and on still
looking into the calm wide brown eyes
sweet child and the trusting innocence
asking always why the world seems so indifferent, hard
swallowing to pause, pausing to gather
thoughts mean so much at this moment
moving from my mind, my spirit to hers
a father's love, ripples on the waters, til touching
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"Watching the ripples"
In a list
A contest entry
- PIF Morning Quickie 10/10 lines/30m by poet2angels.
475 points, ended August 29, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is a poem with more than metaphor or imagery. It is of love that even surpasses the ripples of life; it is of softness of touch that flow ripples through heart and eyes; it is of love that brings togetherness and forth feeling of touch that is difficult to express, but contained inside the heart, hope and blessing of a parent. I am honored that you shared this with me. Its weight worthy of gold. Thank you so much. Frans
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Indeed worth of the ovations. There is a reason and purpose to learning the skill of skipping stones:
to share a loving moment with a child...forever sending ripples into the world!
Bravo, PK!
Marianne
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without a doubt, gold. Congratulations..
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this is reminds me of my poem, Under Water
wonderful write, my friend.
Love, Lane
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Thank You Laney
i read that and i agree same kind of feeling, yes...PK
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a father's love, ripples on the waters, til touching
absolutely lovely... sigh. wish i could achieve this kinda writing sumday nice!
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What a beautiful and touching piece, I can see why this won gold, Congrats!!
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This is so beautiful...
I love this!
"my spirit to hers
a father's love, ripples on the waters, til touching"
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this was amazing it used images and metaphors beautifully and was very touching
a wonderful write well done and best of luck
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This is beautiful ..So touching bringing tears....
Amazing...
Lynda
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So lovely, what wonderful images. "Moving from my mind, my spirit to hers
a father's love, ripples on the waters, til touching" is a beautiful sentiment, beautifully captured in these words.
Good luck in the contest!
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prompt is:
"Watching the ripples"
or the pic above
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