It would be easier
To hold the moonlight
In my arms
To feel its
white wax burn
Encase my heart
Than it would be
To catch your heart again
I saw you once
But the pain
Of drowned dreams
Stopped my heart from speaking
If I could spin the world down
Towards me
And through a miracle
See you again
Could I pause time quickly enough
To teach my heart
The language of apology
And break the barrier
Of time lost
A contest entry
- Spinning Me In Circles[lets put my heart back together] by WishMeAway--x.
700 points, ended September 19, 2007, 13 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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Excellent thoughts here
Yes we so often through our minds refuse thwe joy to the heart for fear of rejections pain . But the mind remembers what the heart forgets therefore the heart reaches out to love once again
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Wow, this gave me the chills. Your words are so powerful, they control the cosmos even. So many lines I like it's hard to pick one. The whole thing is magnificent! What a true talented peice this is.
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Hi Justusdreams, Thankyou for your very kind words about my poem, I do appreciate them very much. I wrote this about someone I really cared for and still do. I hope you have a lovely christmas. Take care of yourself. All my very best wishes from Rose xxx
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Good
I enjoyed your write good imagery. I like "See you again
Could I pause time quickly enough
To teach my heart
The language of apology
And break the barrier
Of time lost
Author notes" How often we want to turn back time to see a love one we lost one more time.
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Wow, such emotion, beautifully penned, well don. Good luck in the contest!
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this made me think of him too.
If I could spin the world down
Towards me
And through a miracle
See you again
Could I pause time quickly enough
To teach my heart
loved those lines.
great job on this hon and good luck
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Love it! Great wording! Love the emotion in this and how well you have done in the wording of this to let us also feel the emotion. Like too many lines to recant them here.
I think many have felt this way. I have and can relate.
And I like your ending...'break the barrier of time lost.' Time is a barrier, and time lost can't be broken, so with the rest of your wording, I like this ending.
Good luck in your contest.
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Hi HopeWithWings, Thankyou so much for your very kind words on my poem. I am pleased that you liked it. This was written from the heart, it's a poem about someone who touched my heart deeply and still does. Thanks again. All my very best wishes from Rose xxx
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This is beautiful, very sad and heartfelt. Winderful write.
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