Before
first broken syllable
scrawls want on heavens winds
or
desperation’s doleful cry
scribbles fear as troubled child,
bewildered
Before
grief’s sorrowed scribe
spills ink upon tongue’s tablet, tense,
blotting hope
or
tear begins to carve scripted path
down time-wearied cheek
I have seen with Everlasting
I have heard with Evermore
I have embraced with Altogether
and have penned with ancient Answer
upon tomorrow’s tender page
Author notes
Isaiah 65:24
Before they call, I will answer. And while they are still speaking, I will hear.
Psalm 139:2,4
You understand my thought afar off. For there is not a word on my tongue, But behold, O Lord, you know it altogether.
In a list
A contest entry
- Sacred PIF - Morning Contest by CarolDesjarlais.
700 points, ended August 29, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-write Party 2 by DancingRed.
300 points, ended September 22, 2007, 31 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Past has faded, futures near
Now's no time to shed that tear
Present stands, awaiting call
Now's the time to give ones all
Have a lovely week...
Eddy
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wow now this is deep[
it is to me
the words were created and writen
for a path way of understanding
our past
this is a great poem
thank you
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Wow, what a wonderful way to arrange your words of thought in poetry with great imagery! A deserveed winner!
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beautiful! I especially love the strength of the final stanza... everything so deliberate and carefully placed - it it quite a thoughtful write...
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Such a wonderful poem!
Words and meanings displayed in a very nice way.
Excellent read
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you did an excellent job with this. I felt that the last stanza was so powerful that it made the whole poem the great tribute it is. Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.
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Very nice, I like how all your images work up to the powerful last stanza. Great use of alliteration - 'desperation’s doleful cry', 'sorrowed scribe spills '
I think you've got an extra space in the third last line.
Thanks for entering.
DancingRed.
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I'm telling you I love that keen eye of yours. Okay, so it's just a space, but most folks wouldn't have noticed and even fewer would have bothered to comment. But I was glad you caught it and like to perfect such "trifles." Thanks for your great comment on the poem and for the opportunity to enter a prewrite.
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This is really wonderful. I think this is excellent.
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Absolutely beautiful! Yes, He knows, and has prepared all things for our blessing. Love the way you have set up the two stanzas of Befores, subdivided by Ors, then the Answers.
Very nice, smooth and sweet use of alliterism. Lovely "tear...carve[s] scripted path down time-wearied cheek", and ...never mind...I loved it all!
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wow, scriptures... I am so interested in all the new scrolls they have found. I wonder why the churches have not pounced on them to add them in or as another text? Perhaps, because I have heard that some are written by women. I have searched but found little.
Without the scriptures as reference...even then... this is a beautiful poem standing on its own. You final stanza is very very powerful. Ty for entering. -
Now this is a case of devine intervention, for the words speak of greatness unbound by touch of finger on key. stunning piece my friend, stunning.
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