I'm dancing in the heavenly sky,
In Draco's arms I fly so high.
The stars are the ballroom floor,
The north's aurora the stage lights.
Twisting, Turning, Spinning we dance,
Tap, modern, disco.
A gasp is heard and we rush towards the window,
A luna eclipse is seen in night's sky.
Constellations sparkle in the distance,
Their light reflecting in my eyes.
The stars made of hydrogen and nitrogen,
An astromoners dream.
Cosmic dust swrils around my feet,
While metorites fly past the dawn.
In the mornings light my dress fades changes,
Into nightie and slippers.
My eyes flirter open and the daylight pours in,
I see Draco wave once more.
A contest entry
- Round one of four by Fire Opal, grannyeri, jess09stevenson, x Empathic Rose x, and IndividualEleven. by IndividualEleven.
800 points, ended September 8, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Nice and well put together, its like a clip out of a movie or an anime?... very good but I dont see alot of questions or thoughts, still great piece thanks for entering.
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dramatic
Very dramatic yet understandable, and keeps one's interest. Well done. Good luck
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The stars are the ballroom floor,
The north's aurora the stage lights.
this description is fantastic I connected to your poem at this point not the beginning but I am glad you waited to drop this cool description at the point in which you did otherwise it probably would not have had the same effect.
enjoyed reading this thankyou
good luck -
Thanks for entering this poem into the contest, and using the words from the word bank. Thought at first this might be filled with rhyming couplets, but only the first two lines are rhyming. Could be just a dream - all this, as daylight has set in and all these night time constellations are gone.
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