Well, I guess
it was the stars...
Elliptic thoughts
bringing me full circle,
now I stand at the start,
looking to the skies.
Will I ever see that
Divine parallax?
I would love to be
moving again.
Or, maybe refractive
emotion...
Do you feel
like I do?
Time gives a view
to the aurora,
Let it glow.
Let me move on
through this...
...Syzygy...
I wish only to be unique...
And if not so,
I would settle for
a Super nova,
to let the cosmic dust
Cover everything,
and become new...
Author notes
My life has become monotone...
A contest entry
- Round one of four by Fire Opal, grannyeri, jess09stevenson, x Empathic Rose x, and IndividualEleven. by IndividualEleven.
800 points, ended September 8, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Awesome
A wondeful journey... a lucid dream. I love the flow and the style. You are unique and very creative. Thanks for sharing your thoughts. Take care.
Tali
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I like this one as well, different indeed from the rest entered, but refreshing, more questions and thoughts left open than most, but I think some of the word bank could have been used more subtle, like in metaphors or something, but thats my opinion, however you have a fantastic ending, thanks for entering!!!
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very good
I like your poem very much. The title intrigued me from the start, and i like the structure you write with. very well described, yet emotional. well done. good luck in the contest.
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I loved the questions the unanswered tone still rinning here. this is a good poem. a unique approach to the poems I have read so far. This one stands out. very well written good luck
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Liked the flow of these lines, the brevity of them as well - good use of words from the word bank in the poem. Easy to read and understand. Thanks for this entry - good luck in the contest.
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