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calling you

i will call & keep calling til' the day
you have the nerve to pick up
& tell me it's over..

how could you use me like this?
how could you make me fall in love?
how could you make me think about us
as you did..just to break my heart?

Author notes

*inspired by Blue October's "Calling You" & a recent mistake, wish it was a bit longer.*

A contest entry

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  • Lagrimas
    December 7, 2008

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    All shall mend

    Each tear we receive in our lives can be mended or filled. Do not let despair win out. Thank you and good luck.


  • Aurielle
    August 31, 2007

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    I like that last stanza

    how could you use me like this?
    how could you make me fall in love?
    how could you make me think about us
    as you did..just to break my heart?


    wow you can write... Keep writing
    Your really good with emotions and know how to bring it to life in paper... I believe you when you speak those words. They make me or anyone feel as if they are the wrong one...

    As you did just to break my heart... this is from the soul


  • Nephalaneous lover
    August 29, 2007

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    wow this was amazing, short and to the point...
    the way you brought out the feelings and emotions was wonderful, the questions placed in this piece were perfect...thank you for sharing this and entering my contestbest of luck to you


  • bananasfoster42
    August 29, 2007
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    calling you is like one of my favorite songs! and this is an awesome poem too

    • lysdarling
      August 29, 2007
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      thank you darling. i love that song too. i could listen to it over and over and over and over and..i could prolly keep going but i'm not going to lol


  • Ange Dechu
    August 29, 2007
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    I like that this is short. It gets the point across clear and it still makes an impact.
    love ya!


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    August 29, 2007

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    who did it angel, hope they have a good pair of sneakers, cause thier gonna have to run fast when the lads here someones upset one of my favourites.

    This is a strong wee piece my friend, tells all there is in perfect flow, well done.

    • lysdarling
      August 29, 2007
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      thank you, it's just another guy who promised too much & didn't care to keep them. i will find the right one eventually.

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