little angel
sleeping soundly
inside a guilty orb,
trusting his shapeless life
to the girl who only knows
how to cradle selfish dreams,
little angel
suddenly awake
and see terror in his eyes,
silent screams form in his mouth
for his bones and his existence are being shattered
by the sharp sickle of his parent’s immortality,
little angel
sleep tight now
close your eyes and forget your pain,
though the gravity of their sins burdened your flesh
the weightlessness of your innocence brought your soul
to a resting place meant only for a blameless one like you.
Author notes
#3 small voices...big screams...stop abortion!
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A contest entry
- Another Fun Contest--I have nothing better to do with my points! =) by ItalianGurrl.
550 points, ended September 26, 2007, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
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great write
This was some really good work here, very emotional. However, honestly though you had some perfect lines the flow could have been a little better. -
There are a few parts of this poem that are just pure gold- in the first stanza- "sleeping soundly in a guilty orb" just a beautiful turn of phrase, and sets the mood for the poem perfectly.
"cradle selfish dreams" like cradling a baby, but never to cradle anything more than her selfish goals and desires .
"Silent screams" honestly, a bit of a cliche, it loses some of its power because it is so associated with abortion and the movie "Silent Scream."
I like the last stanza, the ending of the child at peace at last. A good write, I can see why it won a trophy. -
This is a really powerful piece you have here. It totally captures the real horrors of aboration. I'm totally against it too. You have a true gift with the pen or keyboard I guess.
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that is an amazing piece of poetry you have there. it touched me. truly. the last stanza was perfect. good luck in the contest!
♥Rachel♥
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impressive
grabe you should join the pro life. Galing!
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Thank you...
Good job, good solid emotion and story... you know i'm not for abortion too, if you lay in the bed, why be an adult and face up to your actions. Also there is a thing called adoption and there are plenty of families who would more than love to have a child to love unconditonally. Thanks for entering the contest.
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