As all the families gather, in the early morning sun,
Regatta day is underway, where dreams are lost and won.
The river doused in shimmering light, as ripple lines entwine,
Long shadows splash the giant gum trees, defiant of design.
The quads move up the river, towards the starting line,
In a slow and rhythmic motion, the rowers stroke in time.
Crowd anticipation rises, as the parents proudly wait,
Their siblings set and focussed, to devour the daunting straight
The fog horn blasts, the oars move down and slice right through the water,
As the crew moves off at lightening speed, ready for the slaughter.
The green and gold are out in front, just leading by a yard,
Powering up the river, their resolve to win not marred.
The Cox is screaming, “Give me more, I now need all you’ve got”,
Their aching arms in unison, they know they’ve got a shot.
The crowd are up upon their feet, cheering with all their might,
As the quad torpedoes through the line, the rowers scream with pride.
Please tell me what you think
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Awesome job! You didn't put what option you picked in your notes but I bet I can guess what one it is!
Thanks for your entry
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a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly along, i am not one for rowing though i do like the oford v cambridge ones.
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Imagery complete !
and what an exciting time that you described poetically. A good, solid read. I did question one line as to whether it is correct ...
"The crowd are up upon their feet, cheering with all their might," wouldn't it be: the crowd IS - or crowds ARE??? Just checking!!! joy
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This is indeed a beautiful poem. I can see why you got a GOLD trophy for this. While reading, it's like as if a movie is shown in front of me. Very well done.
Anna.
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I am glad that you won because this is such a fine piece of sporting narrative that surely takes the biscuit.
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Yeah, I could see the whole thing!, great images and very well written. Congratulations on yer gold trophy,
you deserved it,
Floorboards.
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One can well understand why this picked up a gold It is an excellent write and a joy to read The flow rhyme and meter are beautifully done, and like the said rowers fairly glide across the page Congratulations on the gold and a wonderful poem
Ps did you mean stoke or stroke in line 6?
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We won !!!!!
A truly wonderful exciting and climatctic poem that had me standing and yelling all the way. Vivid imagery and an excellent flow made this a very enjoyable experience. Great stuff.
Bazza
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Wonderful poem.Made me feel like I was participating.
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very good
exceptionally well written, i felt like i was at the venue - very well done
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