white witchy woman
her eyes begin to glow
the room was deathly quiet
cold crept from her finger tips
green slime dripped from her nose
as flames shot from her ruby lips
white dress clung to ample hips
as she flew across the room
little child in tow
claws extended towards my throat
I swiftly rethought my course
and gave all the Halloween candy
to the tiny girl next door
Author notes
Rheea
A contest entry
- HALLOWEEN EXTRAVAGANZA - Open til Oct. 31st by Little Feather.
9800 points, ended November 3, 2007, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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spookie!
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Thanks for your entry
Nice flow and structure. Sounds like some Halloween lol. Some trick or treaters can be so wired on candy
Happy Halloween
Tammy
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First, I would like to thank you for visiting my Halloween poem; you were so thoughtful!
I enjoyed the white witchy woman..sounds as if she is Halloween scorned!! Yikes!! and a great spin on the conclusion! haha Best of luck in the contest and please visit me anytime. ♥ Belle
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I loved how you started these write
I had me intrigued and wanting more but I really love the way you ended it with the bit of humor.
LISA
I love these lines;
"the room was deathly quiet
cold crept from her finger tips
green slime dripped from her nose
as flames shot from her ruby lips
white dress clung to ample hips
as she flew across the room
little child in tow"
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I love the scary beginning, I wish you had continued with the tale of this..
The ending kind of threw me , but I think I get it..and decided I like the twist..
Peace and best wishes with this entry
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"the room was deathly quiet
cold crept from her finger tips"
I really like those lines. The piece is very short, and I definitely think you could add more to it. What you have written so far is very poetic which I love. Good job! -
clapity clap well done
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I like this one. the ending was different, but I liked it. i really like the following lines:
white witch woman
her eyes begin to glow
the room was deathly quiet
cold crept from her finger tips
as flames shot from her ruby lips
very descriptive, I like that in a poem. great job. Keep it up
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