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Crayon

The colors of my feelings can not be explained by the portrait of a crayon.

So intense RED could not reflect the passion and anger that swelters upon my tongue.

So flooded BLUE would merely be a vortex that guides you to the actual storm.

So hollow that BLACK would only cliche the true bleak that harbors within.

So lucid that WHITE is only a metaphor for the vacancy that resides inside of me.

So vivid that YELLOW could not begin to imagine the sunny day I long to have.

So implosive that PINK would be to fragile for the love I crave to taste.

So ferment that ORANGE would only be a ray of the sunset I long to touch.

So dirty that BROWN is only the mud that embodies the tainted soil I tread upon.

So ardent that PURPLE could not glow bright enough to mirror my most simple desire.

So poor that GREEN could not imagine the prosperity of happiness I yern to consume.

So insane that MAGENTA could not imitate the hysteria that flows threw my viens.

So lustful that GOLD can not buy the greed that bargins with my hidden cravings.

SO bound by fiction that the rainbow could not portray the fantasies I create.


The colors of my feelings are far to immense to be described by the likes of an

immeasurable.....CRAYON !

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  • desert places
    July 14

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    intelligent

    How long did it take you to do this? I know you're a great poet mystic but did you plan this out? its so well-thought out! If this is one of those poems that just came to you...damn you are good. It's so well reasoned...the colors you choose to depict the things you do is brilliant i especially love this line for its rhyming and the color matched to the emotion: "So insane that MAGENTA could not imitate the hysteria that flows threw my viens." And the description of implosiveness for pink. EXCELLENT. also black brown and white were good.


    • mysticallytamed
      July 15
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      thanks

      actually it just came to me all these did, I did not write any of my poems pryor to putting them in here. Thanks for the detailded comments it really helps a writer progress!!!

  • whitewinged1
    October 14, 2007

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    This is an awesome piece you have penned here.The colors of our emotions screaming to be recognized and set free.
    So lustful that GOLD can not buy the greed that bargins with my hidden cravings.I absolutely love the descriptive properties of this line Ps. Your right it is rather similar to my poem. Bravo !! Well done poet !!


  • Lj-
    September 8, 2007
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    The listing of the colors and reasons was a cool idea.

    Thank you for entering,
    Good luck.

  • aArticfalcon
    September 1, 2007
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    Artistcally crafted

    A measure of light is a measure of strife in a stroke of a crayon

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