Heated words of
enraged passion
pushing away sanity
embracing the nothingness
within my heart
Delivering a message
to all of man
being the example
of a faithless
hopeless existence
Burdened with the
truth, yet relieved
with sin
Murdering my soul
before it lives
foraging false
hope and faith
with idols of
clear consciences
Losing your soul
to higher power
letting control slip
from your grip
Delighted yet hating
the honored gift receive
The curse to deliver His
word
yet
Ecstatic to see the truth
The lack of knowledge is the
the bases for all true faith
But heavy burdens of knowledge
strengthen faith
A contest entry
- Sun Shines Through a Rainy Day by anaisnais.
300 points, ended September 12, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites that dont suck. by parachute fog.
400 points, ended October 20, 2007, 93 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Hmmm .. I'll try and give a better opinion of the poem than the last contest holder ...
I find that your word use is quite good to be totally honest .. you've got nothing missing there. The word use was very strong in most areas ... what I fail to understand is that I felt no emotions arising from the poem... Yes, your poem goes very deep with non-apparent meanings and such .. but I dont find emotion..
some famous person once said
"no feelings in the writer, no feelings in the reader" ..
I think that this is the case here, as if maybe you wrote this when you were numb..
Thank you for entering..
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Thank you for entering my competition and good luck!
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wonderfully put
ty katie i felt your truth and knowledge of the teaching pounding through each word you choose...ty again and peace Katie -
Elegantly done
well done
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wow this is a very deep and passionate poem i must say! i think the way you expressed your thoughts and feelings to this poem was beautiful. great write
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wow this is a great poem u did a great job writing it.
i wonder if u have all of your poems are written this way...i shall go take a look again i think it was good the wording and everything was great keep up the great work.
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