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Man's Shadow



In hunger and pain,
from his cradle
to hallowed grave,
man walks in the shadow
of certain death.


He strives through daylight

and darkness of night,
through the rain and cold;
struggling in vain,
as his youth grows old.


And man, in the shadow
of quill and ink, in dread;
no home to call his own
and no place to lay his head,
writes poetry instead.

He writes of hunger and pain
and dreams of an end to suffering,
distorted reality within his brain;
envisioning a better life,
with an end to sorrow and strife.


In daylight or darkness of night,
through the rain and cold;
woe is his lot, the poor man's plight,
his wretched human condition,
with no relief in sight.


And when all is done and said,
as man struggles in the shadow
of the uphill stone, he is led
to his final abode - his earthly bed;
ending his hunger and pain.

 

 

Author notes

This poem is meant to portray
the sad existence of humanity;
from man's cradle to his grave.

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  • Lakme
    October 6

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    Dignified & beautiful tone

    Beautiful and sad, like life itself. You have a strong flair for writing Poety Muse and the picture you paint is haunting and one I relate to at this time which is why I'm reading it. Life is rich however, which makes it worthwhile. This just my own personal response to what you've written and a reminder to myself.


  • Yemassee gold member
    September 26

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    It's indeed a sad and lonely existence, one I usually try to avoid in poetry but can't in fiction...for whatever reason.

    First, it's beautiful, it echoes that sadness and even the pointlessness of some of our endeavors. I think it also, however, echoes that indomitable spirit, for man is trult amazing at how he struggles on with all these achievements despite the death sentence which is always over his head. Or maybe that just shows what fools we all are...I will leave that for others to debate.

    As I said it's beautiful, even poignant, but now I need to go read something funny, whacha got?


  • Tinselpool
    September 1

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    You have been Acknowledged!

    An emotionally complicated poem... and a very depressing one at that. Beautiful, nevertheless, so keep writing, not necessarily on sad things, but keep writing in general. Not many poets can write such lovely poetry, or even *dream* about writing such poetry! Bravo,

    Claire


  • Puppydog gold member
    August 28

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    DEEPLY TOUCHING!!!

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    Yes, we alll live through many sad and bad times in our lives, and I have found it does not matter whether rich or poor we all cry, laugh, and have our many scars from those times. 's Such is life and all one can do is do their best to learn a little and pass what we learn on to those whose life is just beginning. 's


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 29
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      Thank You, Kevin!!

      I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. Where ever did you get this wonderful award you've presented me with? And how did you manage to get it in this little comment box? Thank you so much, you made my day - again!!
      Peace & Hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • guardianhost gold member
    August 28
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    Congratulations!

    You have been Acknowledged!!!!

  • guardianhost gold member
    August 28
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    Congratulations!!!

    You have been acknowledged!!!


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    August 27

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    You Have Been Acknowledged

    winner for the week of 8/25
    Congrats to you from us all
    You Have Been Acknowledged
    awesome Hun you have done a good job
    Hugs Angel♥


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 27
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      Thank you, Angel!!

      What a nice surprise!! You ARE an angel!! I am humbly honored!!
      Peace & Hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • Melee Vau gold member
    August 22

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    well written - reminds me of the beckett quote: "we are born, our mothers standing aside the grave". yes life is just the long, drawnout drop from our mother's wombs to the cold arms of death. enjoyed the images this poem elicited.


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you, Melee!!

      I'm so glad you stopped in to visit, and I WILL be over your way soon!! Thanks again, and take care!!!
      Peace & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx

  • Very Exceptional

    You do have a way with words, I hope you see the greatness in men and women and all the things we can accomplish. We are all poets but few can sooth the savage beast.


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you, Charlie!!

      I appreciate your thoughtful comments on my work. It's a true gift to have your friendship, your words really mean alot to me. Thanks again, and take care!!
      Peace & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • mysticstorm gold member
    December 4, 2008

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    A very moving and poetic look in the reality of life for many on this earth...wonderful ending of hope and relief found in finally rest in the arms og Grace...
    wonderffully creative and express...thank you for sharing!
    mystic


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you, mystic!!

      I'm so glad you stopped in to visit, and I WILL be over your way soon!! Thanks again, and take care!!!
      Peace, love & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • IansCyberspace silver member
    October 3, 2008

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    A truly painted picture of life

    I was intrigued with your use of the word "hallowed" in the first verse. Went back to the dictionary to refresh my mind and what you've described here is a sacred place. How interesting! That fits well with the happy release of hunger and pain in the last two lines, and while it's true the grave is a body's final resting place I presume the reference to "hallowed" leads us to the hope of a happier ending for the soul?


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you for your thoughtful comments!!

      I'm honored to have your visit to my pages. I'll be over way soon. Thanks again, and take care.
      Peace & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx

  • Ace - LightWithinMe
    July 21, 2008

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    Hello. I think you have highlighted a section of humanity well with this very poetic, almost melodic piece. I think you have also balanced well image creation and diction. My regards.


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you!!

      You made my day!! I'm glad you stopped in to visit, and I WILL be over your way soon!! Thanks again, and take care!!
      Peace & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • eyespy
    June 27, 2008
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    The Truth of our Humanity...

    An excellent statement of truth...


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you!!

      I'm so glad you stopped in to visit, you made my day!! Thanks again, and take care!!!
      Peace, love & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • Sean Logue
    November 24, 2007
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    Excellent.

    I have read a couple of your works, I like them,
    thanks.


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you, Logue!!

      I'm so glad you stopped in to visit, and I WILL be over your way soon!! Thanks again, you made my day!! Take care...
      Peace, love & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    if only poetry could solve the struggles of humanity...

    wouldn't it be wonderful?
    I love the imagery here. Your descriptions are timeless. The entire piece leaves this deep, throbbing ache with the reader. Perhaps guilt? Perhaps sympathy?
    Very well written. I like your rhythm and rhyme, too.


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you for your thoughtful comments!!

      I'm so glad you stopped in to visit, and I WILL be over your way soon!! Thanks again, and take care!!!
      Peace, love & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • Amera gold member
    September 2, 2007

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    This is well done! I didn't want to stop reading. Interesting how you instilled poetry as man's escape; perfect because I think I do that. Your flow is smooth and you paint a vivid image. Good job!

    Love,
    Amera♥


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you, Amera!

      I'm so glad you stopped in to visit my pages, and I WILL be over your way soon!! Thanks again, and take care!!!
      Peace, love & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • anaisnais
    August 29, 2007
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    Thank you for entering and good luck!


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you!!

      I am honored to have been a part of your inspirational contest!! It's a true blessing to have your friendship, and I hope things are looking up for you!! Thanks again, and take care!!
      Peace, love & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    August 28, 2007

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    Only you Cyn,
    Could write such a touching piece about this sad
    reality. Your emotion and expression was vivid and i loved how you formed it.

    "In daylight or darkness of night,
    through the rain and cold;"

    These two lines repeated hit home to the
    message you convey my friend.
    Good luck for the contest.

    Slán Dolores xxxx


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 24
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      Thank you, Dolores!!

      I'm so glad you stopped in to visit, and I WILL be over your way soon! It's a true blessing to have your friendship, and I hope things are finally looking up for you!! Thanks again, and take care!!!
      Peace, love & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • michichoeret
    August 28, 2007
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    great

    wonderfully expressed sadness of human reality


  • NyteShade
    August 28, 2007

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    A very sad piece, but an amazing write. you never really know how many ppl there are out there hiding in the shadows.

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