Tender touching interlude in
that place found only
in the soul's sight.
Sanctuary of peace caught
in that half breath moment
of inner illumination.
Kindred spirits
sharing, giving
strength filled balm
to weary turmoil tossed
life beaten
hearts.
Amnesia minds
suspended
in that eye blink time
when life dissipates and
fills with healing waters
of soothing calm.
© joyce Ingebritson
Author notes
Username:joyya
Real Name/Nickname (what you would like to be known as):Joyce
Age:53
How long have you been on AP:about one year
Any published work (poetry):Yes
Favourite Genres/Categories (ie. Dark, Spiritual): Nature, people
Favourite Forms (Senryu, Haiku, Etheree): My favorite is Versaic form
Freeverse or Rhyme: Both
Personality: Reserved
Acceptance to others opinions (do you respect others opinions on how you could improve your poetry): I listen to all opinions; deciding for myself what I like.
Inspiration to write (why do you write poetry): I write to cope. As a child it was my escape from abuse. As an adult it helped me deal with cancer. Now I write out of pure joy.
Any other information you would like us to know: I am what I am. Love me or hate me, I will always tell you the truth.
A contest entry
- Errant Panther's Amazing Race .... Round 2 by Errant Panther.
300 points, ended September 21, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Did You Win a Trophy? by Nam.
1750 points, ended October 18, 2007, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - big bang prewrite contest round 1 - 3 by serenity silvermoon.
2100 points, ends December 12, 552 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A nice poem that you have written here.
-Nam
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Lovely imagery in these phrases. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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Great job!
Congrats on the trophies for this great piece Joyya, it is very enjoyable.
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Liked the alliteration in these lines - the s sounds make this flow. NIce to have two trophies for this write as well. Congrats on the gold and HM in these tow contests.
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Simply beautiful
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I thought I commented on this one already. Perhaps I just read it more than once, and thought I commented, or got distracted and just didn't come back. eh.
I had a problem with only one line:
"in the souls sight."
I may be totally wrong, and it's been known to happen, and I'll admit to it if I am but wouldn't "souls" be "soul's"? Though it does seem you could be speaking about more than one, which would make it "souls" it just seems you're speaking about an individual soul, and therefore wouldn't it be "soul's"?
I don't know, it just seems to be bothering me, a bit. It's always the little things.
Other than that: a great poem that you have written here.
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I am speaking of two souls. So it would be souls. If you check the contest Errant Panthers you will see the picture this poem is about. I am not able to place the photo with the poem so I realize how confusing the poem could be without it. Thank you for the honorable mention I am happy you liked my poem.
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Beautiful!
Wow Joyya I am so impressed! Congratulations on your Gold, well deserved I must say! I so enjoy watching you bloom, when you first came to AP you were merely a bud, you are in full bloom now I see!
Excellent work here.
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I look back at some of my earlier writes and think, wow, what was I thinking.
I think it is important to grow and learn.
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congratulations on your award and welcome to the next round,
warm thoughts and see you soon.
Frozentearz
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Beautiful Poet! Simply beautiful work written here. I feel at peace after reading your well presented words. Even the lilac background soothes. I wish you the best in this Round. ~Sigh
Much Love & Respect ♥
Renee
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Absolutely brilliant poem, filled with the soft and soothing sounds inspired by the image.
I loved "that half breath moment of inner illumination", "giving strength filled balm to weary turmoil tossed" ( I also used "balm!! in mine ) and "amnesia minds caught in that eye blink time".
Beautiful phrasing, lovely flow, assonance and alliteration sprinkled throughout - I loved everything about this poem.
PJ
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