You're not the only one who turns me into a monster,
but you are the one I can't shout at
and the one who makes me fear ugliness
when I repeat your name in my head, worrying you may receive
a psychic message that I'm not smiling and my hair is a mess.
I believe you can see me at my worst
while you're out until late with friends,
laughing about the moments you've all shared.
(Or maybe you tell them how utterly foolish I am,
and there's another round of drinks
as they clap you on the back for being so clever)
I think I heard you contemplating
saying my name to your parents and sisters one time,
but I put on loud music
so I wouldn't be able to wonder anymore about the result,
or lack thereof.
I unzipped myself in front of you a long time ago,
and waited for you to touch
each mangled thought and attempt, as
I fought back my instincts to protect my feelings; your purity.
But I felt a magician's stroke with wonder,
in all your movements and in your interest of me.
Wandering in through folds of skin,
-do you know what I know?
teasing my happiness
but physically, you've forgotten where you belong.
Did you feel me last night, hiding my face in the stranger
as I outright begged
for you to come back?
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A contest entry
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this is nice use of words and will make people all over the world get goosebumps. comment on my stuff?
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I unzipped myself in front of you a long time ago,
and waited for you to touch
each mangled thought and attempt, as
I fought back my instincts to protect my feelings; your purity
really great image in that stanza and a well flowing poem
love yoo hun
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lordy mercy.
this was perfect.
because you have to re-read it in order for it to make sense...and it just gets better and better.
great write babe.
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xx ♥
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Wow, deep. =] I love it!!
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This is awesome! Some of it confuses me, but thats what I like about it. Its sorda my own interpretation!and the one who makes me fear ugliness
when I repeat your name in my head, worrying you may receive
a psychic message that I'm not smiling and my hair is a mess.
I believe you can see me at my worst I really lk the lines:
It creates a great visual! Good job and keep writing!
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thank you!
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This is amazing. I actually cringed at a part it hurt me so much to feel the words running over my face. This has sooo much emotion to it, its like oozing out from beneath the pressure of my eyes.
I adore it, its like...I think I know almost how it feels. When you are loving, but almost more protecting and trying to heal them. But you want them to heal you too. But you almost feel forgotten, or like some sort of slave, giving yourself away...but at the same time you are afraid one day they will find you ugly or you will have no more to give.
This is a very exhausting kind of realationship I think...or maybe this is just a moment of yours? I don't even know. But my favorite part like hurt so much >>
each mangled thought and attempt, as
I fought back my instincts to protect my feelings; your purity.
But I felt a magician's stroke with wonder,
in all your movements and in your interest of me.
That little section there. Was amazing. Like...aaah. Everything you try, everyway you almost beg to give away your love, your skin, your soul. But you don't want to, you just want him to feel. But even though you don't want to throw yourself at him like...you are proud, to know that someone wants you. So much curiousity & love & pain in those lines. I am dizzy with wonder at your inspiring write.
Shocked into your periwinkle page. Aboslutely fabbbulous write. Crash u inspire me, you are amazing. ♥♥♥
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gyeejddsh
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you are beyond amazing!
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