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Shadow Man



Struggling shadow man
of uphill stone, rolling
toward his earthly bed.

From creation’s cradle
to hallowed grave,
man walks in shadow
of certain death,
struggling in vain,
as his youth ages.

Shadow man of quill and ink;
no home, no place for head,
writes poetry instead.

Words, hunger-wrung in suffering’s end;
reality’s distortion of finer visions.

Woe is poor man's plight;
wretched human, halved
with no real relief.

Struggling shadow man
of uphill stone, rolling
toward his earthly bed.

A contest entry

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  • PastelMoons gold member
    July 7
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    Awesome...


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      July 7
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      Thank you for stopping by!!

      I apprecate your thoughtful words, thanks for the kudos!!
      Cyn


  • thepoetssoul
    April 7

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    This is an amazing piece of poetry you have penned.
    Of uphill stone, these words grab and tug.
    I really like the way you write.
    Be blessed in all you do.

    Tony

  • bowmore bill
    March 30

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    they just keep coming

    Hi Cyn, don't know how you do it, the standard and exelance of your writing is amazeing.
    Although i find it difficult at times to understand your work, this one touches a nerve,for i am indeed a shawdow man, rolling at speed to my earthiy bed. at least this is my interpratation..LoL

    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      July 7
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      Thank you, Kind Sir!!

      I really appreciate all the nice comments you have for my poetry. Thanks a bunch for the kudos, Bill!!
      Peace & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    March 18

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    Lasty two Stanzas were Brilliant
    nice work
    liked your wording alots

    by
    \the poet of hearts and beautiful words


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      July 7
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      Thank you for reading my work, and for sharing your thoughtful comments!!

      I apprecate your time, you made my day!! Thanks for the kudos!!
      Peace,
      Cyn


  • Free Man
    September 10, 2008
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    OMG!!!

    Wonderfully written, Poetess!!!!


    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      July 7
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      Thank you for stopping by...

      I apprecate your thoughtful words, thanks for the kudos!!
      Cyn


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    August 29, 2007
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    This is one of
    those poems that starts the thoughts of are we doing enough!
    The answer of coarse is no. I don't think we could ever do enough to help the poor and needy, but we must never give up on them.

    Your poem as ever, represents your beauty as a kind and caring soul who is always ready to help.

    Thank you so much for being YOU!

    Slán Dolores xx


  • Passionate Phoenix
    August 28, 2007

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    brilliantly written well done. This is portrayed very well, makes a point and gets you thinking. brilliant and a great topic well done X


  • Jadon
    August 28, 2007

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    Man's lot is to struggle!

    Well written. Reminded me of the fact that from the minute we are born we begin to die.
    Of course not a cheery write, so the optomist in me argues with some of the thoughts. The "earthly bed" being for what pertains to the earth, but the spirit continues. I also "envision another life".
    Your poem does speak of a life examined as man writes his poetry. I thought I should look at the image that was your prompt. I see this suits it very well.
    Among your lines I found the image of "man struggles in the shadow of the uphill stone" gave me much pause for thought and reflection. The idea of struggling in the shadow, (all his days?, struggling in minimal light (understanding), shadows sometimes a relief from the harshness of labouring in full light, does the man struggle because he is trying to ascend beyond the stone into a full light...)
    Thank you for sharing something that I can consider today. A good poem that prompts one to consider and reflect upon life. Perhaps the poet in the image and your write represents you. Jadon

    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      July 7
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      Thank you, Kind Sir!!

      You are a Philosopher. I appreciate all the thoughtfully reflective comments you have for my poem. You've given me much food for thought. Thanks again, you made my day!!
      Peace,
      Cyn


  • anaisnais
    August 28, 2007

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    Brilliant. Love the style and the choice of imagery here. To the Point. I'm new, if you'd like to critique my work I'd be most obliged. Keep writing.

    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      July 7
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      Thank YOU!! You are so kind!!

      I appreciate your stopping by to read my poetry. I know I'm very late in responding to your comment on this piece, but I just found this one of yours and I wanted to say thank you. I'll be over your way soon. Take care.
      Peace, luv & hugs,
      xx Cyn xx


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    August 28, 2007
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    Oh, this alone is simply powerful penning..
    "And man, in the shadow
    of quill and ink, in dread;
    no home to call his own,
    no place to lay his head,
    writes poetry instead."

    what a great job of editing and refining poetry... I remember an english Porf telling us something along the lines ...you write a milion dollar poem and every extra, unnecessary word costs a hundred thousand to you.

    so scrunch, punch and munch on yoru ideas until they are pure poetry, word by word.

    Great job!

    • Cynthia Gaines gold member
      August 28, 2007
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      Thank you for taking the time to critique my entry in your contest. After your comments, I edited my poem and I hope you'll take another peek:
      http://allpoetry.com/poem/show/3349908
      Thanks again, I enjoyed this write very much!!! Peace


      • CarolDesjarlais silver member
        August 28, 2007

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        It was always more than worthy, and why I believed in it so much.

        • Cynthia Gaines gold member
          August 28, 2007
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          Thank you!

          You are too kind... this poem looks terrific now; much more like the greatest contemporary poetry of today... seriously. You possess a rare, yet real muse's gifts, and I thank you so much!!!

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