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Clowns and Horses

You can make a life
Out of a piece of string
And you can turn a phrase
Without the need to ever sing
And all the world will bow down
At your feet
As all the clowns and horses
Dance and caper for you in the streets

You can paint a picture
With a single stroke of a brush
And you can ease your mind
Without the need to ever rush
And then your dreams will come tripping
Over their feet
As all the clowns and horses
Dance and caper for you in the streets

[REFRAIN]
What magic there is
In a single grain of sand
Worlds dancing within worlds
Just laying right there in your hand
A myriad of lights
That's found in a single drop of rain
A universe of words
Just waiting for you to name...

You can share a rainbow
In the morning glory sun
You can whisper memories
To that very special someone
And moments that you live
That simply sweep you off your feet
As all the clowns and horses
Dance and caper for you in the streets

You can make a life
Out of a piece of string
And you can turn a phrase
Without the need to ever sing
And all the world will bow down
At your feet
As all the clowns and horses
Dance and caper for you in the streets

As all the clowns and horses
Dance and caper for you in the streets
As all the clowns and horses
Dance and caper for you in the streets...

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  • Macsword
    September 29

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    Nice...

    glowing refrain. Good words. A fine song here poet.


  • Frogzter gold member
    September 14

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    What a song... Intense and well thought out. I see it has made the rounds. THanks for stopping here with it. IT was nice to read and I could almost here the music to accompany it. THanks for the entry and best wishes,

    Frogz~

  • poets whisper silver member
    September 12

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    you must have meant this to be a song because it certainly reads like lyrics. I could sing it. I like the repetition within the verses. The title drew me in too, I like that a lot. Thank you for entering the contest


  • XxForeverFaithfulxX
    October 30, 2008

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    Amazing. I loved it. I loved the rhythm and the rhyme. Awesome write. Thanks for entering and good luck.

    ~Kayla


  • Griswold silver member
    August 12, 2008

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    This is very good, nice rhythm and rhyme, and a very happy, confident feel about it. Perfect for this contest... Scott


  • owlish
    August 11, 2008

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    Attractive rhythm and rhyme.. nice song. Makes me happier.. thanks for your entry.


  • Brit-Girl
    July 25, 2008

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    I like this a lot! Sadly I have to dq it because it is over the 50 line count
    sorry.


  • crazymomma
    July 12, 2008
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    You have very vivid imagery in this. The story was so nice. thanks for entering


  • Dancing Alone
    June 3, 2008

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    i haven't read this yet, but i will soon, i wjust wanted to let you know that the rules have changed, so good luck.


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    May 24, 2008

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    very nicely penned, I love the flow of these lyrics and the way you've crafted this, it is open for the reader's own interpretations. A thoroughly enjoyable read.
    Rory


  • 2lullabyhaven
    May 21, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry. You have some very great lines in here, I wont say how poignant they are, however, I did enjoy the read lol


  • ellipsist
    January 2, 2008
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    entered into too many contests already...


  • Stardust100
    December 9, 2007

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    Great write I did say no more than 30 lines BUT this did keep my attention so I won't DQ you.

    Great write I liked it.


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    October 23, 2007
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    I enjoyed reading this. It is something that I can relate to. I may not take it the exact way you mean it, but I can relate to it. You are a very talented writer, and I hope to read more of your excellent work. Bravo!! Bravo!! Keep up the good writing. Good luck in the contest.

    Always
    ~Missing My Soldier~


  • Akimbo
    September 13, 2007

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    my favorite entry!

    This is beautiful. I love the simplistic themes you chose to personify. The images magnify in my thoughts to become even more vivid and real. Personifying life in a bit of string is wondrous. If life, (and petty much everything else), is what you make of it then how immensely important must imagination be? Personally, I saw a bit of string stand up and conquer an enormous Dust Bunny Monster just this morning!
    Best to you,
    Kj


  • waydownuponjoy
    August 28, 2007

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    This is beautiful ...

    I love reading these kinds of poems and when they are lyrics wanting for that special tune what more can us poets ask for? You've outdone yourself this time and I could just picture the scene while the crux of the song lies in the sweet sharing of acknowledgement for another human being's life. Beautiful and keep them coming! joy


  • michichoeret
    August 28, 2007
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    am smitten


  • Trent plus pen
    August 28, 2007

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    great

    I'm gob smacked.
    I always have something constructive to say after reading something.
    But there was nothing to say.

    I was thinking as I re-read this "ooo maybe her poem will go for one stanza too long" and it winded up at the perfect spot. Its excellent.

    The use of metaphor is subtle and effective and the repetition of rhyme is the most effective technique you use.

    And you weren't a prewrite.

    Wow.

    Good luck!
    Much love and respect.
    Trento

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