It was the day the world lost sight
blinded by those calling wrong right
using their higher power for reason
shamed heaven and earth by treason.
Traitors of life, heart and soul
who in the name of religion stole
innocence, truth and right away
leaving their evil here to stay.
By the atrocities they inflicted here,
though their deeds of evil are clear
we were not the end nor beginning
of this wickedness born dark sinning.
The horror, pain, spirits agonizing
tragedy, tears of human suffering
broken hearts and families dreams
we now know terrors infamous extremes.
We should also know and never forget
that this evil has no mercy or regret
cares nothing of innocence or childhood,
mayhem and murder is their only sacred good.
Well, I have news for the terrorist beast
Those souls devoured by your evil feast
Have assured me they haven't gone too far
They have calm and serenity where they are.
And it is no question, they told me so
one of them used me to reach one I know
Her friend was one of the fireman you killed
he mended her broken heart with love he filled.
So for every soul you take from this earth
You give heaven another good soul to birth
with every loving heart you send upstairs
you send for us here on earth a spirit who cares.
You evil bastards may kill ten down here
they care for thousands of us and have no fear
just remember while your terror thrives on mortal strife
the decent souls you murdered have eternal life.
Though, unlike yours, their hearts feel love
those crushed, burned or jumped from seventy floors above
leaving friends and families devastated and crying
or the fireman who died bravely trying
to save lives of others
they may not treat you like brothers.
You might be despised
don't be surprised.
I wouldn't be so anxious to die
those, you terrorist, in death are first to meet
may just want an eye for an eye
and , well, guess who then has the front row seats.
Author notes
If you read this poem please comment on it , thank you.
Never forget those that died or all the pain and suffering but those that died though they may be gone for now they are never lost souls.
The faces:
http://www.rcfp.org/moussaoui/jpg/P200336.jpg
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A contest entry
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Very nice. Thanks for joining this contest and helping to honor those fallen heroes.
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wow this is outstandingly beautiful tribute for the day that shocked the world full of raw emotions from stanza one through to the last good luck in the contest with your brilliant words
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Absolutley beautiful
Incredible, it sent chills through me, im even crying a little.. wow. The serenity and the grace portrayed in this poem it leaves me speechless... really hits home the heroism and the greatness of all that risked their lives trying to save others from that awful tragedy. Shows the humanity of all the people who tragically died, instead of just the numbers that are shown on the tv screen. This is beautiful, a real challenge to people who seek to cause terror showing them how we havent lost to them, that in trying to scare us they create a world of more love and strength.
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You spelled descent instead of decent.
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THANKS FOR THE NOTE,
CORRECTED IT, THANK YOU
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WOW! Awesome! Great write. This is a true tribute to those fallen heroes of 9-11. Thanks for joining this contest so together we can honor those who fell that day.
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hot poem.
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Bravo
Wonderful write. Your emotion pours through your words. I think you did a fantastic job. -
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thank you for
your kind comment glad you enjoyed the read, DreamDarlin2u
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THis poem brought tears to my eyes i have never read a poem yetto do that thanks for remembering the ones who died in 9/11 this was a great write and an awsome way to show your emotion about the subject im so glad people like you are on this site. Maybe more like you will enter this contest,once again this was a beautifull write
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glad you liked
appreciate your kind words
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Poignant
Negative comments first...oi.....
The end of stanza three doesn't quite make sense. And your rhyming is a bit forced. With that said:
What a fabulous poem! You brought up a lot of things I didn't think about. One of those was the religion issue. Being an atheist myself, I often don't think of that. But if the afterlife, if someone WAS murdered, Christians believe God said "an eye for an eye," which means, you get exactly what you give.
I like the firemen reference. They did good on 9/11, and I think it's cool to mention them. Your poem on this kicks my poem's ass. -
Great Emotion.............
shown in this piece of sheer truth. You let the terrorists know that we will not bow down to them an those they killed are now watching over us from above, but like the ending most namely the last line. Thanks for your entry and good luck to you...by the way, nice picture to tie it all together!!!~~Toni~~
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at the beging of the poemyou had a nice rhyme scheme and the meter flowed well, but you stopped rhyming less than half way through
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I don't know how anyone could possibly ever forget what we saw that day and all the days to follow, we in Australia watched as all this unfolded, and then lived it to an extent when so many Aussies were killed in the Bali bombings, many things we see in life that we will never forget to be sure. I still remember exactly where I was as I watched those planes fly in, as do most people, it will be a question for years to come. Where were you when the towers fell. Brilliant write hun, you do write with such passion, it's hard not to be swept into it all..
Kaz
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thank you Kaz
for your kind words and it is nice to know that someone notices the passion with which one writes thank you so much
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A well written piece on an event nobody, irregardless of where they live or what they believe, will ever forget.
On a critical level, I actually think the use of rhyme had a negative effect on the overall power of the piece. Some of the rhyming is well done, whilst other bits seem a little forced. It's obvious at points that a better word has been forsaken in order to fit the rhyme and metre.
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Hit the wrong button lol
thanks C.W. yes I agree the poem s rhyme is a bit forced but the contest prefereed rhmye and it's good practice I need to learn better methods for writing end line rhyme for sure. Thanks for the honest critique. -
thanks C.W.
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I loved this. I honestly believe that we need to be reminded of that moment everyday. No matter how painful the memory, I think it reminds people why our troops are fighting and what it felt to have our country attacked. I have a poem you might enjoy since I can see you have no remorse for the terrorist scum. If you'd like to read it, let me know and I'll send it to you through a message. It's not where near as long or as well done as yours, but it does get the point across.
I love it.
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thank you for your comments
and yes please I would like to read your poem
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This is an awesome write. Such a horrid thing indeed, and I'm sure the people who lost their lives are in a better place...and will NEVER be forgotten. Well penned indeed
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Thank you Julie
I hope it is not forgotten we seem to forget so many things .
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A powerful and emotional poem, my friend, and one which I think many readers will respond to.
Bill
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thanks Bill I hope your right
sept. 11 is coming up soon.
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Good write. We too soon forget. The war oversea was started overhere by them not us. War is hell but peace here and abroad is an expensive freedom.
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