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Dream Travel

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Dream Travel

Close your eyes, let us voyage now.
Travel with me, I’ll show you how.
Take my hand, you’re no longer blind.
Travel in dreams, open your mind.

An orange glow, over the sea.
Let your mind drift and follow me.
Be amazed at things you will find.
Travel in dreams, open your mind.

See the three peaks as they arise?
Out of the sea they touch the skies.
Magical worlds are so refined.
Travel in dreams, open your mind.

Feel lighter now, open your heart.
We’re on our way, you made a start.
Come with me leave sorrows behind.
Travel in dreams, open your mind.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Kyrielle

A Kyrielle is a French form of rhyming poetry written in quatrains (a stanza consisting of 4 lines), and each quatrain contains a repeating line or phrase as a refrain. Each line within the poem consists of only eight syllables. There is no limit to the amount of stanzas a Kyrielle may have, but three is considered the accepted minimum. Some popular rhyming schemes for a Kyrielle are: aabB, ccbB, ddbB, with B being the repeated line, or abaB, cbcB, dbdB.

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  • Luna Tique Fringe
    September 1, 2007

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    Perfection, oh and I have to agree with Whoochi,,good thing you have two hands Cangrats, too!


  • Whoochi gold member
    September 1, 2007

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    Absolutely well deserving of the gold....The more I read your Kyrielle the more I like that form, you know I detest them but am thinking of trying one...loved this, made me feel like I was holding your hand and dreaming and seeing all the gorgeous images you describe...and gorgeous pic....


  • anaisnais
    August 31, 2007

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    Your poem is beautiful I took great pleasure from reading it. Thankyou. Also your notes re:- style, mean much to me as a new poet. It leads you to wanting to know more and more. Cheers!;


  • penman gold member
    August 29, 2007
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    Excellent

    What a beautiful poem for the picture. Another incredible use of form. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Desire gold member
    August 29, 2007

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    Wow!

    Holy Moly~ I don't believe I have tried a Kyrielle yet..but will give it a whirl!!
    Love this piece Precious!
    Beautifully worded and the images are stunning!
    When I read~ the orange glow over the sea..
    I wanted to cry like a baby...
    Geeeeeeeeeeeeesh~!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • second-born
    August 29, 2007

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    Oh I do certainly want to travel with you!!! This is such a wonderful kyrielle...with beautiful sentiments...and with a sincere delightness from the poet's heart...and yes I'll 'open my mind and leave my sorrows behind...'


  • myrataal silver member
    August 29, 2007

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    What a wonderfully structured freedom!

    I find your work inspiring, lyrical, simply beautiful in its execution. To read you, is to dance in landscapes of serenity. Thank you for once again demonstrating the wonderment of refrain and repetition, giving this Kyrielle a special Amera touch.

    Love
    Myra


    • Amera gold member
      August 29, 2007
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      O myra, thank you so much. Getting a comment from you is like finding that special present under the Christmas tree. You inspire me as well and I have learned so much from you. I missed you and I hope you enjoyed your trip.

      Love,
      Amera♥


  • WhisperingSpirit
    August 28, 2007

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    Beautiful The way you have given this such perfection.
    Wow you took me there a million times over.
    The beauty of your words were told of a beautiful
    place. Good luck my friend.
    So well worded.


  • poetryality silver member
    August 28, 2007

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    I love the Kyrielle! It is the smoothest form with repetition. You have made this poetic form look easier than it is. Your work is breathtaking, and affords the reader an opportunity to be soothed as well as enchanted.

    Brilliant work dear one. Your poetry is a vision of loveliness as you are. BEAUTIFUL! I wish you well in this comp. Although I don't think Luck plays into this musing at all.


    Much Love & Respect ♥

    Renee


  • HaleyMary
    August 28, 2007

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    Beautiful write. Great poetic form. This made me think of going off on an adventure and experiencing new things and going to new places even if it's only all in our dreams and imagination. Good luck in the contest.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    August 28, 2007

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    Oh My I really really like this well done
    thank you so much for entering my contest.


    delila


  • PerVirtuous
    August 28, 2007

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    Sweet, sweet, sweet. I am calling ticketmaster as I write this comment to get as many tickets for this as I can. No matter how much I owe the government, I will spend my last dime on this voyage! Outstanding!


  • StarEyes
    August 28, 2007

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    This I think is one of my favorites from you!!!

    "Travel in dreams, open your mind."

    I love that line!!!!! And well seems like, to me, that we all have dreams that we love to live in, I know I do. But this one, Oh this one, Girl you will never know what this one means to me! Thanks for sharing this one, and best of luck in this contest!!

    and much love

    Nyetta


  • Bazza
    August 28, 2007
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    A beautiful journey of peace and tranquility and fantasy worlds of wonder. Great stuff,
    Barry


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    August 28, 2007

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    well if this journey through your words is like the journey through opening my mind, I'm with you, take me anywhere you dream, and I'll follow.

    who said being an Uncle didn't have dividends.Proud of you Niece.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 28, 2007

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    Wow,

    Awesome poetry, love the picture, and your beautiful words that follow. You grace the page with such imagery! Keep up the great works teach, peace.

    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~

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