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Poison

Words, falling from drunken lips,
Hurt, stemming from your wasted kiss.
This pain, doesnt want to go away,
To late, im addicted and im here to stay.

Cant seem to find my reason,
You have become my poison.

Dont let me go, Dont let me fall,
Ive had a taste, I want it all.
Your words confuse, I dont understand,
How can my poison be a man.

Smoke, rolling from your lips like lies,
Toke, take a hit and realize,
I dont, understand this addiction.
You dont, even realize what you've become.

Cant seem to find my reason,
You still remain my poison.

Dont let me go, Dont let me fall,
Ive had a taste, I want it all.
Your words confuse, I dont understand,
How is my poison still a man?

Choke, as your swallowing another pill,
You dont, see how much it affects your will.
I dont, know why you need these drugs so much,
When all... All i need is just your loving touch.

I still cant find my reason,
Because your still my poison.

Dont let me go, Dont let me fall,
Ive had a taste, I want it all.
Your words confuse, I dont understand,
My poison still remains, a man.

I wont let you go,
Ill keep holding on.
Ill help you through,
Till this poisons gone.
You dont need these drugs,
Just be all you can,
When the poisons gone,
You'll still be, my man...
You cant run from me.

Author notes

This was writen about the most important person in my life and the struggles we have been through. Im still revising it but i wanted some feedback on it.

Please give me your honest opinion on if you would listen to this as a song

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  • Absolutely Abstract
    September 1, 2007

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    At first...I was like "why am I reading this..this is just going to be another sad abusive mush of words." But, I finished it and it was really a beautiful poem. Well written and emotional and not stupid sappy like I was ready to assume. Although I don't favor the outcome of -you- staying with an addictive man, but that's what poetry is sometimes-the real, sad, truth.
    Thank you for sharing a raw feeling in a way people can relate.


  • Bhind my eyes i cry
    August 28, 2007
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    wow, sarah this is good. sad, but good. you're a deep writter.
    -lisa


  • aeroheadv1
    August 28, 2007
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    Amazing...

    Wow, this is deep...one of the best I've read in a while!


  • blondone
    August 28, 2007

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    yes, I can see this as a song great flow and grand imagery its sad tones adds to the read I was held in by the words great job