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Friendly Eyes

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Sorry if I hold  your hand too tightly
I’m still afraid of the dark
It has been a long time for me
By the way, have I told you, you have friendly eyes

I must admit, sometimes the pain is not so bad
Other times I am doubled over as I try and contain myself
fighting tears of frustration and disillusionment
By the way, have I told you, you have friendly eyes

There is something so familiar about you, yet you are a stranger
I just can’t be alone tonight, memories are too real
The nights are long and there doesn’t seem to be many stars
Will you stay the night, so I can face the day
By the way, have I told you, you have friendly eyes

I promise not to cry, if you hold me to your chest
Let me hear the beating of your heart
I need you to stay, I feel so alone
By the way, have I told you, you have friendly eyes




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...thank you for staying...I feel a bit lonely tonight...so ...thank you - unknown

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  • Glasyalabolas
    September 9, 2007

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    This is a good piece, telling well a good story of finding solice from loneliness and pain in the company of a stranger. It doesn't matter how we ease our pains or how we take our comfort, at the end of the day, stranger or friend, as long as we find understanding, even hope, then we can ask for no more. I like the repetition in the last line of each stanza.

    Good write and congrats on bronze.


  • Sandygram silver member
    September 9, 2007

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    Lovely Write

    Congratulations on winning the Bronze. You have penned such a beautiful poem. I can so relate to wanting someone to hold on those lonely nights. We all long to be held by the one we love. Sometimes it just is not meant to be. Thank you for sharing. You take care, Sandy


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    September 9, 2007

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    I need you to stay, I feel so alone
    By the way, have I told you, you have friendly eyes


    Ahh..I love these heartfelt expressions dipped with love....very powerful expression...you did a great job..thanks for the entry in my contest...

  • Uniquely-Scarred gold member
    September 5, 2007

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    i like this good writing... the repertition works well in this poem, i wish you the best of luck in this contest


  • Princess Perdue gold member
    September 5, 2007

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    You have penned such a beautiful piece of work here...I love where you took the prompt. The imagery is simply stunning and written with such a delicate pen. Truly beautiful. Well done and good luck with this wonderful entry for the contest.

    Shaz xx


  • poeticweaver gold member
    September 4, 2007

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    Nice,

    A very well weaved piece here poetess of light.. You are such a blessing to read, and I hope you know you have touched me through your poetry! Keep on being you, and be blessed, for you are a blessing!

    -Timothy aka poeticweaver~


  • Swan song gold member
    September 1, 2007

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    I love it! by the way have I told you you're a good poet. The flow here is excellent and very romantic, by the way have I told you you are a good poet. Well done dear, very good!


  • Lonewolf2008 gold member
    August 31, 2007
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    what expressions of xARE AND LONLINESS YOU SHARE HERE.very nice.

  • deleteit
    August 29, 2007
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    This does speak alot through words, emotions and visions. Good luck in the contest.


  • tomisb gold member
    August 28, 2007

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    A friend of mine says that we fall in love with just a part. it becomes the whole. I think that perhaps sometimes we just need company.
    Love, Tom B.

  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    August 28, 2007

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    awww this was a beautiful write and it had so much feeling and emotion in it
    this was just beautiful
    well done and best of luck


  • tawk gold member
    August 28, 2007

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    I love how your repeat throughout your write. Wonderful imagery and emotion. I so enjoyed reading. Good luck in the contest


  • Amera gold member
    August 28, 2007

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    aww... this is so sweet! I got the feeling that you are scared to death that he'll leave you. I could just picture you looking into his eyes and pleading.

    Love,
    Amera ♥

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