If I could Knit;
I'd knit you a sweater to wear
so it'll almost be like I'm there
holding you.
Because I miss you.
If I could Knit;
I'd knit you one giant map
on a scarf which on your neck you will wrap
to find me.
Because I need you.
If I could Knit;
I'd knit you gloves to keep you warm
In the on coming storm
of my emotions.
Because I cry for you.
If I could Knit;
I'd knit you a pair of socks
on which will be clocks
counting the minutes away.
Because I count the days without you.
If I could Knit;
I'd knit you a blanket
with words on how I recommit
my heart to you.
Because I love you.
If I could Knit;
I'd think of ways to knit to you.
so you can remember me
when days get tough
when life gets rough
because I'd remember you..
If I could Knit...
Please tell me what you think
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This is a very cute idea. How ever did you come up with this, seeing how you can't knit, apparently? The rhyme is catchy, the sentiments adorable and pure.
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Very Sweet
This poem is very sweet. I can picture it in a Christmas card to a lover or spouse. It's beautiful. -
Awe, this IS really cute! I love love it. Love the flow and the sentiment! Very niice!!!
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Awww... This is so cute, I really love how you used the "If I could knit" I love it. I knit! Heh.
This is awesome. I love your each little individual things you would knit.
Great poem
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this is great!!
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I like this poem. It didn't all rhyme, but when it did it sounded good. You talked about knitting. Knitting would make me bored. Take too long. I don't like to wait.
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WOW!
that is simply powerful, I wish I could say that but I am unable to in my life, good flow and good rhyme, heck good poem all around. Keep up the egood work.
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This was funny and beautiful at the same time. Well done. It flowed well.
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This was really sweet. I loved the repetition. My girlfriend is away for a few days and i mss her like crazy. I can so relate
Love D.L.
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Interesting..
Very interesting take on missing someone.. Very imaginative and creative.. Sweetly written, good flow and wonderful imagery in this piece. If only knitting were the answer to all of our problems, huh? I love the underlying message in this piece and the metaphors are wonderful.. You have a wonderful talent here and I really hope to get the chance to read some more of your work.. Very good piece!!
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This is really sweet!!
I loved it a lot.
If only you could knit though....
My favourite line:
If I could Knit;
"I'd knit you a sweater to wear
so it'll almost be like I'm there
holding you.
Because I miss you."
Its so sweet!
Great Write,
Mel
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brilliant.. goodness what a great poem!
i really really really enjoyed this(yes, three reallys, thats how enthusiastic i am), although im not usually a fan of rhyming poems..they always seem a bit too, y'know, chilidsh or something, but this one is totally changed my opinion..youre a really orignal writer, and now im going to check out some of your other stuff. -
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Oh wow, I'm really glad you liked it :]
I agree with the rhyming poems, but i can't help but write them. I think extremely talented poets can pull off a beautiful poem without rhyming, but i don't think i'm there yet. Maybe i'm just in the wrong mindset. But thank you! I really really really (haha) appreciate the feedback.
|aiko|
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this put me in mind of something i have been wanting to write for a while, i think you have done a great and beautiful job on this my friend, keep it flowing
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I really like this poem..it's full of wonders and reasons and it just really..I dunno.
It's just good =]. I can't explain it and I guess that's the best way TO explain it. And indeed, it is orignal.
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