i hang here day after day
wishing to have somthing to say
you look into me
admire your reflection
if only there was a way i could admmimre mine
but no i am you
i am what is around me
who am i
i am everything
i am everyone
yet i'm epty
and all alone
if only
i could pocess
pocess somthing of my own
not just a stollen identity
how i wish to be somthing else
a bird maybe
anything but me
as long as i have my own identity
so i just hang here hoping one day
to admire myself
as you did today
all i want is...an identity
A contest entry
- Ages 13 & Under ONLY ~ Creative Thinking by Amunet Wolfbane.
525 points, ended September 1, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
do u think this poem flows i dont any suggestions on how to make it flow better?
Comments
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You did this well, nice and strong! Bravo!
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Oops!
I misspelled imaginative
better take my own advice!
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Imatinative
This is original and really thought provoking. You have taken a common object and given it a personality. I guess my only suggest would be to use spell check, it stumbles in a few places but the basic idea is great!
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